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    Opinion on text

    I have translated into English an account of a journey (originally written in Italian) to wonderful Yemen. Of course the text is rather long, and I don't expect anybody to correct it... but I was just wondering if I could get general advice as to style, or if you could point out repetitive mistakes, or big blunders that really stick out and spoil the reading. I felt that traslation went smoothly, because I had written the text and didn't need to interpret it, but maybe it was too smooth and I overlooked some traps.
    Here is the link to the text
    Licinio web - Yemen, Arabia meets the Indian Ocean
    The part that I like best is what comes under the title "Trekking on Jabal Milhan" on the last page.
    Thank you for your advice.
    Andrea

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    Re: Opinion on text

    Quote Originally Posted by licinio View Post
    ILicinio web - Yemen, Arabia meets the Indian Ocean
    The part that I like best is what comes under the title "Trekking on Jabal
    You are right. It is pretty long. Nevertheless, you could post a paragraph (or two or three) at a time. One thing I have found so far:
    I have 2 hours’ delay on the schedule.
    I would say:
    I have two hours of free time on the schedule.

    Or:

    I built two hours of free time into the schedule.
    Or something like that.

    ~R

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    Re: Opinion on text

    I'm sorry, but I'll take your advice and post a few paragraphs at a time. Thank you for your feed-back, for the moment!

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    Re: Opinion on text

    All in all, I like what I see so far.

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