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    Would You be sow kind to read this letter and respond me if it's right or wrong (grammar and everything) Thank you for your time and consideration.

    "Dear Sirs,

    I am writing to ask for your assistance with starting the Immigration to Winnipeg and joining the local Jewish Community.

    I hope me and my family are eligible to apply under the Community Support Priority Stream.

    I'm 36. I hold a bachelor's degree in economics from The Hebrew University of Jerusalem and over 10 years working experience as economist and Information Systems officer in wide range of enterprises: small-medium to large-scale.

    My wife, Sonya (32) is authorized Shiatsu Therapist. We have two daughters: 10 years old and newborn.

    We got married in Israel, but originally have separately emigrated from the former USSR in 1990 (Sonya from Moscow and me from Kiev).

    Now, after we have built our life in Israel, we took the decision to make a change and relocate to Canada. We intend to continue our professional carriers in Manitoba and we hope to find here the life values we are looking for.

    I would appreciate your sending me the necessary forms and information.

    Thank you for your time and consideration,

    David Blum"

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    Quote Originally Posted by Ginger1 View Post
    Would You be sow kind to read this letter and respond me if it's right or wrong (grammar and everything) Thank you for your time and consideration.
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    Would you be so kind as to read this letter and point out any errors?
    (I might read more, but I am already up too late. )

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    Quote Originally Posted by Ginger1 View Post
    I hope me and my family are eligible to apply under the Community Support Priority Stream.
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    I hope my family and I are eligible to apply....

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    PS: Say:
    I need some advice.
    ~R

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    Quote Originally Posted by RonBee View Post
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    Would you be so kind as to read this letter and point out any errors?
    (I might read more, but I am already up too late. )
    Thank you

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    Quote Originally Posted by RonBee View Post
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    I hope my family and I are eligible to apply....
    Thank you

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    Quote Originally Posted by RonBee View Post
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    Thank you

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    You're welcome. Come back soon.

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