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    "If you don't pay your heating bill soon you may be cut off."

    Can we rewrite the above as:

    If you don't pay the heating bill,

    1. you will find yourself without warmth
    2. you will find yourself in Alaska/the fridge
    3. you will end up in Canada/the fridge
    4. you will end up freezing

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    Re: proofreading

    Your electrical/power/oil/heating service will be disrupted.

    None of your choices are great. But by process of elimination, I'd choose A. If this happened in Arizona in July, you won't end up freezing. But it certainly won't send you to Alaska! Or Canada! Where did those choices come from?

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    Re: proofreading

    Quote Originally Posted by Barb_D View Post
    Your electrical/power/oil/heating service will be disrupted.

    None of your choices are great. But by process of elimination, I'd choose A. If this happened in Arizona in July, you won't end up freezing. But it certainly won't send you to Alaska! Or Canada! Where did those choices come from?
    Agreed....{sigh} everyone thinks Canada is cold all year round!!!

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    Re: proofreading

    Quote Originally Posted by Naamplao View Post
    Agreed....{sigh} everyone thinks Canada is cold all year round!!!
    Everybody may think that way, the only exception being me, who's aware that summer in Canada is warm but can be very warm depending on the location (the Montreal Open, which is an outdoor tournament, takes place in August). Still, when we're talking about Canada, I usually associate it with hockey and chill.

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    Re: proofreading

    Quote Originally Posted by Barb_D View Post
    Your electrical/power/oil/heating service will be disrupted.

    None of your choices are great. But by process of elimination, I'd choose A. If this happened in Arizona in July, you won't end up freezing. But it certainly won't send you to Alaska! Or Canada! Where did those choices come from?
    Suppose you're living in a country where winter is mild but you need heating at home to feel comfortable. But if heating is disrupted, you could feel cold. The speaker, using those examples and and knowing that the temperature in Canada or in Alaska can drop below -40 C, emphasizes that you had better pay or else it is going to be like being there.

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    Re: proofreading

    It still doesn't really work for me. It sounds like Alaska or Canada is a giant debtor's prison, where are you sent for not paying your utility bill.

    You'll end up FEELING AS THOUGH you were in... would be okay

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