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    Default Marks encourage students.

    I am trying to practise my writing skills. If you see some mistakes in this short text, please tell me and correct to me. Many thanks to you.

    When you are successful in doing something and you share your happiness with other people, you will feel happier. It is similar to good marks encourage students to learn. I completely agree with this point of view.

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    Default Re: Marks encourage students.

    Quote Originally Posted by thienthan20 View Post
    I am trying to practise my writing skills. If you see some mistakes in this short text, please tell me and correct to me. Many thanks to you.

    When you are successful in doing something and you share your happiness with other people, you will feel happier. It is similar to good marks encouraging students to learn. I completely agree with this point of view.
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    Default Re: Marks encourage students.

    Quote Originally Posted by thienthan20 View Post
    I am trying to practise my writing skills. If you see some mistakes in this short text, please tell me and correct to me them. Many thanks to you.

    When you are successful in doing something and you share your happiness with other people, you will feel happier. It is similar to good marks encourage students to learn. I completely agree with this point these points of view.
    There are problems with the sentence I highlighted in red.

    It is similar to using good marks to encourage students to learn.

    This is better but still a bit awkward to me.

    Using good marks to encourage students to learn is a similar idea(concept).

    This is another way to say the same thing.

    In the last sentence you have two points of view - sharing happiness and giving good marks.

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