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    This is a story of an old man and naughty boy named Ali.They both lived in a same neighbourhood.Ali was a very naughty boy and always plays prankes to the old man.Once weather was not very good and suitable to go out but Ali went to the park without his mother's permission.Suddenly the wind started blowing strongly and strom came with thundering clouds. He was afraid and tried to to run towards the home but he was unable to see clearly and his scarf flew away to the tall tree.suddenly the old man appeared carrying a stick on his hands.He thought now old man will punish him for his bad deeds but he surprised when the old man fetched the scarf from the tall tree with the help of his stick and gave it to Ali and smiled.He apologized and than they both shake hands and walked towards the home together.
    Please correct the mistakes. Thanks.

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    quote="Ibn Batota"]
    This is a story of an old man and naughty boy named Ali.They both lived in a same neighbourhood.Ali was a very naughty boy and always played pranks on the old man.Once, the weather was not very good and suitable to go out but Ali went to the park without his mother's permission.Suddenly the wind started blowing strongly and a storm came with thundering clouds. He was tried and afraid to to run home but he was unable to see clearly and his scarf flew away to a tall tree. Suddenly the old man appeared carrying a stick in his hands.He thought, now the old man will punish me for my bad deeds, but he was surprised when the old man fetched the scarf from the tall tree with the help of his stick and gave it to Ali and smiled.He apologized and then they both shook hands and walked home together[/size].[/color]
    Please correct the mistakes. Thanks.[/quote][/color][/size]

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    ...He was tried and afraid to to run home...
    Is it ok?

    FRC

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    Quote Originally Posted by Francois
    ...He was tried and afraid to to run home...
    Is it ok?

    FRC
    No. :)
    Sorry I mixed sentences.

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    He was afraid and tried to run towards the home..

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    Quote Originally Posted by Ibn Batota
    He was afraid and tried to run towards the home..
    The word home does not use article or preposition.

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