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    Re: A Real Story But Stranger Than Fiction

    You need to make paragraphs, thus:

    • Stranger than Fiction
      Written by Dr.Abdulwadood Shulubi
      Translated by me

      Had not the following strange unusual story narrated by an ex-Police Commander , published by the authentic scientific Magazine, “Civilization of Islam”issued in Syria during 1950s and edited by the famous scholar , the departed Dr.Mustufa Al-Suba’i , I would not believe a character of it at all .

      Suliman Al-Alousi , an ex-General who worked for the Police narrates:
      ” At a hot summer night when the air got as tongues of flame , I walked to the Tigris river ; seeking for a breath of cool breeze to refresh myself.Sat on the shore at “1 .A.M”, I saw a surprising strange scence I have never ever seen in my life .I saw a frog coming in a hurry from the opposite shore .No sooner had it got to where I sitting , than a scorpion crawled down from the frog’s back heading to a pile of hay nearby.After some minutes ,the scorpion crawled back and hopped on the waiting frog’s back heading back to where they came from.”walked towards the pile of hay to figure out this strange mysterious trip, I found a guy lying on the piled hay . I thought:” The guy must have been stung to death by the scorpion that crawled away and carried by the frog that left “,Suliman added.

      Perceived my presence ,the guy woke up asking me whether or not the time of Fajr(dawn)prayer had approached!Out of the blue, a stranger moment , a dead snake still bleeding closer to the guy !I recognized that the scorpion had stung the snake to death that was about to bite the guy. I contemplated :”would this happen in these nowadays!?It is a miracle from Allah, the Exalted for the guy’s sake that saved him from death. Suliman added:”As an ex-officer worked for the Police ,I sought information about the guy’s life .One of my previous assistant officers told me that the guy had been well known for his righteousness and piety .He he had been entirely dutiful to his crippled parents with diseases and he had often stayed up all nights for some years so late that he did not sleep until it started to dawn .He spent all his fortunes he had for his parents’ sake , for their health , for their peace of mind and for their good treatment until they passed away while they supplicating Allah , the Exalted to save and enter their son into the Paradise on the Judgment Day.


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    #12

    Re: A Real Story But Stranger Than Fiction

    Thank you Mr.RonBee for your efforts exerted on my topic.
    I appreciate all that you have done on my topic.
    Again, thank you very much.
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    Re: A Real Story But Stranger Than Fiction

    Quote Originally Posted by Ayed
    Thank you Mr.RonBee for your efforts exerted on my topic.
    I appreciate all that you have done on my topic.
    Again, thank you very much.
    8)
    You are quite welcome. Translating cannot be easy. Now I'll see if I can finish. Feel free to comment on my suggestions.

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    #14

    Re: A Real Story But Stranger Than Fiction

    Quote Originally Posted by Ayed
    Out of the blue, a stranger moment , a dead snake still bleeding closer to the guy !
    Unfortunately, "out of the blue" doesn't work very well there, although there is the element of surprise. However, the surprise was that he saw something unusual, not that something (or someone) did something surprising. Perhaps:
    • Then I saw another surprising sight. Near the man lay a dead (or dying) snake, its life's blood oozing out of it.


    Quote Originally Posted by Ayed
    I recognized that the scorpion had stung the snake to death that was about to bite the guy.
    • I realized that the scorpion must have stung the snake to death just as the snake had been about to bite the man.


    Quote Originally Posted by Ayed
    I contemplated :”would this happen in these nowadays!?It is a miracle from Allah, the Exalted for the guy’s sake that saved him from death.
    • I wondered how such a thing could have happened. I decided that it must have been a miracle from Allah the Exalted that saved the man from death.


    [quote="Ayed"]
    Suliman added:”As an ex-officer worked for the Police ,I sought information about the guy’s life .One of my previous assistant officers told me that the guy had been well known for his righteousness and piety .
    The first sentence is a little awkward. Try:
    • Suliman added: "As an ex-police officer, I sought information about the man's life. One of my former assistant officers told me that the man had been well known for his righteousness and piety.


    Quote Originally Posted by Ayed
    He he had been entirely dutiful to his crippled parents with diseases and he had often stayed up all nights for some years so late that he did not sleep until it started to dawn .He spent all his fortunes he had for his parents’ sake , for their health , for their peace of mind and for their good treatment until they passed away while they supplicating Allah , the Exalted to save and enter their son into the Paradise on the Judgment Day.
    The first sentence, especially, is rather awkward. Try:
    • He had been entirely dutiful to his crippled parents, and he had often stayed up so late taking care of them that he did not sleep until dawn. He spent his entire fortune taking care of his parents, making them as comfortable as possible. On their part, they supplicated Allah the Exalted to save and enter their son into Paradise on Judgement Day.


    (Please note what I left out of my revision.)

    What do you think?

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    Re: A Real Story But Stranger Than Fiction

    Mr.RonBee!How come a student dare to comment on his teacher's corrections?In what world!
    It is funny for me to correct your amenments, Louisian man!. 8)

    what do think

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    #16
    Well, I appreciate your comments, but I do think it is important for me to get your opinion on things. After all, my job is to help you express yourself better, and I can do that better if I know how accurate you think my interpretations are.

    Thanks.

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