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    Paragraph

    Are there any grammatical errors in the paragraph below?
    It was a nice, cool morning when we set out in our neighbour’s car to the zoo. My uncle drove the car.But since he drives recklessly, my father took over after some distance. There was much traffic. But my father could deal it because he has a lot of
    patience. He does lose his temper at times. After traveling some distance, we did not have any petrol. We were getting annoyed. To make us feel better, my uncle told us that we shall reach the zoo soon.

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    Re: Paragraph

    Quote Originally Posted by samfat33 View Post
    Are there any grammatical errors in the paragraph below?
    It was a nice, cool morning when we set out in our neighbour’s car to the zoo. My uncle drove the car.But since he drives recklessly, my father took over after some distance. There was much traffic. But my father could deal with it because he has a lot of
    patience. He does lose his temper at times. After traveling some distance, we did not have any petrol. We were getting annoyed. To make us feel better, my uncle told us that we shall reach the zoo soon.
    That is the only grammatical point in the passage, but to make it read better I would make a few more minor changes, as follows:
    It was a nice, cool morning when we set out in our neighbour’s car to the zoo. My uncle started to drive the car, but since he drives recklessly, my father took over after some distance. There was a lot of traffic. But my father could deal with it because he has a lot of
    patience. Though, he does lose his temper at times. After traveling some distance, we ran out of petrol. We were getting annoyed, so to make us feel better, my uncle told us that we would reach the zoo soon.

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    Re: Paragraph

    Thanks Nail.But could you please write to me if these sentences are incorrect.

    1.There was much traffic.
    2.We did not have any petrol.

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    Quote Originally Posted by samfat33 View Post
    Thanks Nail.But could you please write to me if these sentences are incorrect.

    1.There was much traffic.
    2.We did not have any petrol.
    They are both fine as sentences, though the first one is a little pedantic and, in the context, the second is not quite right in meaning.

    It would be more usual to say "There was a lot of traffic" and "We ran out of petrol".

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    Thanks once again Anglika.

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