My favorite Activity
My favorite activity is listening to music because it relaxes me. Ever since I was young, I would come home from school and listen to music. Anything related to music always seemed to catch my attention. I would even watch music videos on television. When I donít have anything to do, or when I am bored, I listen to music. I also have the radio on when I am doing homework or any other activity. This may bother some people but I find it a great help. There are two reasons for this. The first (reason-omit) is that music helps (me-omit) relieve my mind when there are problems. The second reason is that I am able to focus (my mind) better when the music is on.
Another way to say this might be: ...I seem to be able to concentrate better.
It would be better to write all that you have to say about each of the reasons straight after you introduce it.
So: There are two reasons for this. . The first (reason-omit) is that music helps (me-omit) relieve my mind when there are problems. Whenever I am listening to music, I just seem to forget about my personal worries; and when I am not in a good mood, I listen to music to cheer myself up. (Music helps me ignore my problems-omit: you have said this), I can alway find some type of music to fit my mood (Some types of music I enjoy listening to are; Indian, Rap, Hip-Hop, and Oldies - this might be better coming at the end, as more a general statement about music.)
The second reason is, that I am able to focus (my mind) better when the music is on. Another way to say this might be: ...is, I seem to be able to concentrate better.... I could be working on a very difficult math problem, and if there is music playing in the background, I am able to tune out everything else and just focus on that math problem. When there is complete silence, my mind tends to wander more. ( You might omit the 'more') (I usually canít just focus on one thing - this is implied in your 'mind wandering'). For this reason, I have a large collection of CDs so that I always have my favorite music on hand.
In conclusion (since you are writing informally, you could say, "As you can see), my favorite activity is music.
I like music because it helps me relieve my problems. Music also helps me get focused when I am dealing with difficult issues or when I just need to figure something out. (This is repeating what you have just said above.)
You might say : "With so many different types of music to enjoy, like Indian, Rap, Hip-Hop, and Oldies, and the benefits music has brought to/brings to my daily life, no wonder it has become an essential part of my day. (Music is great; everyone should learn to enjoy it in their own way.-I would omit this.)
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