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I was resting by the small stream of Chillion and thought how tranquille it was. I was born in the nearby city of Canton and I have lived here all my life with my family.
It was a marvellous resting place and brought back all my youthful memories.While there I would listen to the gentil murmer of the water and the tunes of the song bird as they flew overhead.
In the tepid water I would occasionaly fish.
But if I was not successful I would be happy to while away the time away from home and my large family.
I also liked to read and think about my tasks at school and the work I had on to do on my family's farm.When asked, I tell my friends that the little stream, Challion, just outside Canton is a chaming spot to rest and meditate.I would recommend it to anyone.
You have above the basis of a good essay. Remember to write short sentences and explain one or two things at a time.Add some of the things I have left out but don't clog you essay and don't repeat yourself.Good luck with your essay writing.
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