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    Hi there,

    I think that the following sentences are right, if no, I would really appreciate it if you could correct them:

    -I disagree with slavery
    -I think that nowadays, in the twenty-first century, it's pathetic that in some countries of this world, slavery still exists as a legal activity.
    -She could neither be free, nor do whatever/what she wanted.
    -I send this story to you
    -I send you this story
    -I'm sure you'll be against slavery soon
    -You are the only one who can make it possible
    -Your composition is weak in content, you don't explain what you are asked for in the instructions
    -Salma, you were a slave once, is that right?
    -I paid the owner of the slaves for their freedom. Now they are all free and live in the States.

    Another question:
    Is it ok to say at the end of a formal letter "thank you for your attention"?

    Thanks, you are all always a great help!

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    -I disagree with slavery
    I think you can only disagree with a person. You might want to say "I am opposed to slavery" or "I think slavery is wrong."
    -I think that nowadays, in the twenty-first century, it's pathetic that in some countries of this world, slavery still exists as a legal activity.
    still, nowadays, 21st century....a bit repetitive
    How about "I think it's pathetic that in some countries, slavery still exists as a legal activity." (It's more concise.)
    -She could neither be free, nor do whatever/what she wanted.
    Seems fine besides that confusion about whatever vs. what.
    Check out § 73. whatever. 1. Grammar. The American Heritage Book of English Usage. 1996 for a bit more information.

    -I send this story to you
    -I send you this story

    Usually English-speaking people (at least Americans) use the future or progressive tenses-not the present. So maybe "I am sending you this story."
    -I'm sure you'll be against slavery soon
    This sentence is a bit random and presumptious.

    -You are the only one who can make it possible
    Make what possible?
    -Your composition is weak in content, you don't explain what you are asked for in the instructions
    Are these your teachers comments?
    It's a bit unclear but grammatically well written.
    -Salma, you were a slave once, (is that) right?
    fine. :)
    -I paid the owner of the slaves for their freedom. Now they are all free and live in the United States.

    Hope this helps!!

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