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    A person with a strong charachter who impressed me

    Every individual has an important role to play in life. There are many people in the world. Not everyone behave the same. not everyone look alike. Each and everyone behave differently. We meet different faces every day as we travel from place to place. but we tend to forget them. There are few who may impress us and remain in our memory. These poeple have some kind of uniqueness about them.
    Mr.Nickson is a person who impressed me. I met him in a cafe in France, last Thursday. I was seated on the second bench. There was a man -who seemed to be serious -was seated on the first bench. Mr .Nickson sat next to the man and said "don't you have a sense of humor?". the man didn't reply .The man s was not interested in Mr.nicksons' comment. I burst into laughter. I tried my best to control myself. He came and sat next to me and told he did not like people who were serious.We introduced ourselves. We spoke for quite a long time .
    He was a well readed man. There was always some meaning to what he says; his words were very meaningful. Also he was found to be very humorous. Not only he laughs for himself but makes others also laugh.
    I can not imagine that he s 45. I was spellboundedwhen he told me. I am very young and I have just come out of my college but still i can't realise the age difference between us. I spoke to hime freely without as if i was speaking to my classmates. He is a friendly type of character. h always keeps on smiling. He frequently tells smiling is a good medicine.
    He did not speak unnessasarily. He spoke to one when that person was interested. i wonder why he has not got a job when he is highly qualified. i wanted to ask him about this point. One day I spoke to him about this. Suddenly he began to laugh loudly. He told me why should I bargain my freedom to live a luxurious life. He told me that he wants to live freely and that was the main reason why he did not get married.
    though he was very rich. he wore local clothes and was living a poor life. He woke on sandals, spent money freely and donated money to whoever asks him but never took it back. The only fortune was from the article he wrote but still he lives a life of luxury as welll as being steady and brave. He knows the way to enjoy life and I have never met a free man like him before. ever since I met him I cannot forget his face.

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    Re: Can you correct me essay for mistakes and tell where I went wrong .plzzzzzzzzzzzz

    Quote Originally Posted by Thagsana View Post
    A person with a strong character who impressed me

    Every individual has an important role to play in life. There are many people in the world. Not everyone behave the same. not everyone look alike. Each and everyone behave differently. We meet different faces every day as we travel from place to place. but we tend to forget them. There are few who may impress us and remain in our memory. These poeple have some kind of uniqueness about them.
    Mr.Nickson is a person who impressed me. I met him in a cafe in France, last Thursday. I was seated on the second bench. There was a man -who seemed to be serious -was seated on the first bench. Mr .Nickson sat next to the man and said "don't you have a sense of humor?". the man didn't reply .The man s was not interested in Mr.nicksons' comment. I burst into laughter. I tried my best to control myself. He came and sat next to me and told he did not like people who were serious.We introduced ourselves. We spoke for quite a long time .
    He was a well readed man. There was always some meaning to what he says; his words were very meaningful. Also he was found to be very humorous. Not only he laughs for himself but makes others also laugh.
    I can not imagine that he s 45. I was spellboundedwhen he told me. I am very young and I have just come out of my college but still i can't realise the age difference between us. I spoke to hime freely without as if i was speaking to my classmates. He is a friendly type of character. h always keeps on smiling. He frequently tells smiling is a good medicine.
    He did not speak unnessasarily. He spoke to one when that person was interested. i wonder why he has not got a job when he is highly qualified. i wanted to ask him about this point. One day I spoke to him about this. Suddenly he began to laugh loudly. He told me why should I bargain my freedom to live a luxurious life. He told me that he wants to live freely and that was the main reason why he did not get married.
    though he was very rich. he wore local clothes and was living a poor life. He woke on sandals, spent money freely and donated money to whoever asks him but never took it back. The only fortune was from the article he wrote but still he lives a life of luxury as welll as being steady and brave. He knows the way to enjoy life and I have never met a free man like him before. ever since I met him I cannot forget his face.
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    Every individual has an important role to play in life. There are many people in the world. Not everyone behaves the same. not everyone looks alike. Each of us behaves differently. We meet different faces every day as we travel from place to place. but we tend to forget them. There are few who may impress us and remain in our memory. These people have some kind of uniqueness about them.

    Mr. Nickson is a person who impressed me. I met him in a cafe in France, last Thursday. I was seated on the second bench. There was a man who seemed to be serious was seated on the first bench. Mr. Nickson sat next to the man and said "Don't you have a sense of humor?". the man didn't reply .The man was not interested in Mr. Nickson's comment. I burst into laughter. I tried my best to control myself. He came and sat next to me and told he did not like people who were serious. We introduced ourselves. We spoke for quite a long time.

    He was a well read man. There was always some meaning to what he says; his words were very meaningful. Also I found him to be very humorous. He not only laughs for himself but makes others laugh too.

    I can not imagine that hes 45. I was spellbound when he told me. I am very young and I have just gotten out of college but still I can't realize the age difference between us. I spoke to him very freely as if I was speaking to my classmates. He is a friendly type of character, who always keeps on smiling. He frequently says that smiling is a good medicine.

    He does not speak unnecessarily. He spoke to one unless that person was interested. I wonder why he has not got a job when he is highly qualified. I wanted to ask him about this point. One day I spoke to him about this. Suddenly he began to laugh loudly. He told me why should I bargain my freedom to live a luxurious life. He told me that he wants to live freely and that was the main reason why he did not get married.

    Though he was very rich. he wore local clothes and was living a poor life. He walks in sandals, spends money freely and has given money to whoever asks him, but he never asks for it back. His only fortune is from the articles he writes but still he lives a life of luxury as well as being steady and brave. He knows the way to enjoy life and I have never met a man as free as him before. Ever since I met him I cannot forget his face.

    Not sure I got all of the tenses the same. You keep switching from "he did" to "he do".
    Many of your sentences contain several ideas. Just above "fortune from, life of luxury, steady and brave". This may be a matter of personal style so I left it alone.

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