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    Letter for a university (please check it)

    Can anyone check my letter please?
    If there are wrong things, please correct it.
    THANKS!



    Dear Monash,

    Firstly, I'd like to introduce myself, my name is Tom and I'm 16-year old. Through this letter, I'd like to ask some questions about the Arts faculty. Actually, I'm going to take the Performing Arts faculty next year in Monash university, Clayton campus. I've heard that if we want to join the faculty, we need to get involved in an audition that will see and promote us, is it true?
    If its true, what kind of audition we would have to do? However, are there any requirements beside that? I think this is enough for today, I'm waiting for your answers.


    Thanks,
    Tom


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    Re: Letter for a university (please check it)

    Before looking for mistakes in spelling, vocabulary etc, I would check its register: shouldn't it be a formal letter?

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    Re: Letter for a university (please check it)

    Yeah, it should be a formal letter.

    Please check the mistakes. THANKS!

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    Re: Letter for a university (please check it)

    Do you mean the "facility" ??

    Faculty is a teaching department for a school setting.


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    Re: Letter for a university (please check it)

    Quote Originally Posted by jomo27 View Post
    Dear Monash,

    Firstly, I'd like to introduce myself, my name is Tom and I'm 16-year old. Through this letter, I'd like to ask some questions about the Arts faculty. Actually, I'm going to take the Performing Arts faculty next year in Monash university, Clayton campus. I've heard that if we want to join the faculty, we need to get involved in an audition that will see and promote us, is it true?
    If its true, what kind of audition we would have to do? However, are there any requirements beside that? I think this is enough for today, I'm waiting for your answers.


    Thanks,
    Tom
    As a formal letter to a university, it is far too informal.

    Dear Mr xxxxx,

    My name is xxxxx, and I am a 16-year old student who is [considering/thinking] about taking a course in Performing Arts at Monash University next year. I have some questions about the course and the campus that I would like to ask.

    First, is it [right/correct] that applicants to this course will be asked for an audition as part of their application? If so, what form does the audition take?

    Second, are there other requirements besides the audition?

    Third, if I was accepted for this course, will I be expected to live on campus?

    I look forward to hearing from you,

    Yours sincerely,

    XXXXXX [full name]




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    Re: Letter for a university (please check it)

    Quote Originally Posted by susiedqq View Post
    Do you mean the "facility" ??

    Faculty is a teaching department for a school setting.

    Not facility, but faculty.

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    Re: Letter for a university (please check it)

    Quote Originally Posted by Anglika View Post
    As a formal letter to a university, it is far too informal.

    Dear Mr xxxxx,

    My name is xxxxx, and I am a 16-year old student who is [considering/thinking] about taking a course in Performing Arts at Monash University next year. I have some questions about the course and the campus that I would like to ask.

    First, is it [right/correct] that applicants to this course will be asked for an audition as part of their application? If so, what form does the audition take?

    Second, are there other requirements besides the audition?

    Third, if I was accepted for this course, will I be expected to live on campus?

    I look forward to hearing from you,

    Yours sincerely,

    XXXXXX [full name]




    Thank you very much!

    I really appriciate it.

    Anglika, you always help me whenever I need it.

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    Re: Letter for a university (please check it)

    A suggestion:
    If I am accepted for this course, will I be expected to live on campus?


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    Re: Letter for a university (please check it)

    Quote Originally Posted by RonBee View Post
    A suggestion:
    If I am accepted for this course, will I be expected to live on campus?



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