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    Question Need help to correct my resume - thanks!

    Hi!
    I wrote my resume in English and I would like to have your advises and correct before send it.
    I put off some information (like date, and identity) because of discretion (I have a current position in France but I would like to postulate for an other position in an international program in England).

    Thank you very much for your help!

    (If anybody needs help in French, doesn't hesitate!)

    Bye.


    Postulate to Trainee Program TOP International

    EDUCATIONAL BACKGROUND

    Postgraduate Specialized year on project management, design and development of integrated systems in aerospace and ground vehicles at Ecole Nationale Supérieure des Arts & Métiers
    - Skills acquisition on aerodynamics, system engineering, project management and communication.

    Masters degree in engineering at Ecole Nationale Supérieure d’Ingénieurs du Mans.
    - Skills acquisition on mechanics, physics, mathematics, electronics, communication, management, economy, working laws, …
    - Specialisation: industrial data processing, sensors, instrumentation and tests.

    “DUT Génie Mécanique & Productique”: Two-year university degree in mechanical engineering at University of Savoie.
    - Professional diploma with a specialisation in mechanical engineering, Computing Assisted Design (CAD), production control.

    High School Diploma (Baccalauréat)

    WORK EXPERIENCE


    EADS Group division, which is the world leader in aerospace systems with integrated framework spanning France, UK, Germany, and Italy. (current position)
    - Since January 2008: in XYX programme, in charge of research and design on a specific perimeter. Main tasks are: analysing the needs, designing the system and the requirements, providing testing and validating plans.
    - Until December 2007: in an integrated French/UK team in charge of requirement management deployment using DOORS tool. Main tasks were: deploying DOORS tool in our aerospace projects, developing methods and procedures, performing training for users, providing technical and methodological support to project teams, managing a consultant and subcontracting/purchasing associated to DOORS. Was the representative of EADS for AFIS (association in system engineering gathering the most important French companies).

    PSA: Car manufacturer. Professional thesis in system engineering.
    - Was in charge of the project of capitalization experience about requirement design using the tools DOORS (leader in requirement management tools). Main tasks were: technical and methodical studies, planning, deployment on several projects, training and technical aid.

    SNECMA: SAFRAN Group division which designs/produces boosters for fuses and missiles. Placement.
    - Designed a new kind of control process using ultrasound. This product should be non-destructive testing and portative. Intensive use of image and signal processing, electronics and programming in Visual Basic and C++.

    THALES Systèmes Aéroportés : ThalesGroup division which produces seekers. Placement.
    - Was responsible of planning and stocking internal tools shop.
    - Assisted the sticking laboratory.

    J’ENSIM : student organization that obtains contract work from businesses whose activities are related to the students’ field of ENSIM study.
    - For University of Maine, developed – in a team of three people – then upgraded a Website in HTML/PhP languages, coupling with a MySql database. The purpose of this Website is to allow to students to evaluate online the University courses.

    TIXIER Mécanique : Company which manufactures mechanical parts. Placement.
    - With the objective to optimize production cycles in terms of time, quality and costs, designed tools with use of SolidWorks (CAD) as well as methods and procedures.

    Nuclear power station EDF.
    - Analysed production of nuclear section.

    CONFORAMA: Department store of furnishings and electrical appliances.
    - Job as a warehouseman / shop assistant every Saturday and during holidays.

    LANGUAGES AND SPECIAL SKILLS

    Languages: - French: Mother tongue.
    - English: Fluent. 785 on TOEIC Test (2005). Worked on a French/UK team until 2006.
    - Spanish: Conversational.
    Personal skills: Determined, curious, strong oral communication, moving.

    WORKING KNOWLEDGE

    Computing: - MS Office: perfect use of Word, Excel, PowerPoint, Access, MS Project.
    - CAD: perfect use of SolidWorks. Good skills in CATIA V5, AutoCAD.
    - Databases: MySql, Access.
    - Requirement Management: Expert level on DOORS and Reqtify.
    - Other Tools: basic knowledge in Labview, Simulink,…
    - Languages : good knowledge in Visual Basic, C & C++, Matlab, HTML, PhP. Basic knowledge inJAVA, Assembler and UML.

    MISCELLAneous

    Sports: Taekwondo, judo, football, snowboard, bodyboard, jogging.

    Hobbies: Music (drums, guitar), computing, cinema, construction of a family house.

    Others: Driving licence, boating licence, holder of the AFPS (First Aid Certificate).
    Member of Association Française d’Ingénierie Système (AFIS).
    During 2003-2004: vice-president/project manager of J’ENSIM (student organization that obtains contract work from businesses whose activities are related to the students’ field of ENSIM study).

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    Here are my suggestions:
    Master's degree

    EADS Group division, which is the world leader in aerospace systems with integrated frameworks, spanning France, UK, Germany, and Italy.


    Re:
    Main tasks are: analysing the needs, designing the system and the requirements, providing testing and validating plans.

    Analyzing the needs, designing the system and the requirements, providing testing and validating plans for what?


    University (capitalization--should be lower case)


    Re:
    Personal skills: Determined, curious, strong oral communication, moving.
    What is meant by "moving" there? (If you mean that you think you are good at motivating people, then I suggest that you say that.)
    (I would hire you.
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    Default Re: Need help to correct my resume - thanks!

    Hello RonBee.

    Thank you very much for your help! I hope that the Human Resources Department will say the same as you and that he will hire me! That's my main goal to obtain a position in England, USA or Australia.

    See you and thanks again.

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    I am glad you found my suggestions useful.

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    P.S. Say: Please help me correct my resume. Or: I need help correcting my resume. ~R

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