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    Default pleaze enter

    hi everybody
    I'm a new memer in this site
    hope it will help me to improve my English Languag
    I want u to help me and tell me where are the mistakes in the following poem
    and correct them for me

    ican find alover
    i can find afriend
    ican have security
    until the better end
    anyone can camfort me
    with promeses again
    but i don,t want some
    pretty face to tell me
    pretty lies
    all i want is someone
    to believe
    honesty is such alonely word
    every one is so untrue
    honesty is hardly ever heard
    but mostly what i need
    from you

    Thanx
    Be Good

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    Default Re: pleaze enter

    The previous thread is mine
    I'm waiting for your replies
    pleaze help me

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    Hello,
    You may mean this in your poem.
    I can t find a lover
    I can t find a friend
    I can t find security
    Until the end of my life
    No one can comfort me
    with promises again
    I don t want any
    with false masks
    to tell me lies.
    All I want is someone
    believe in faith and loyality.
    They don t exist.
    All I need is a loyal and faithful friend.
    Where can I find him / her ?

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    Default Re: pleaze enter

    Thank u for ur reply
    but I didn't erit this poem by myself
    I just red it
    and put it in another forum
    then I faced many criticism toward it
    the members told me that there are many grammatical mistakes in it
    Now I want from u to tell me where the grammatical mistakes are
    and correct them to me

    Thank u again

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    Default Re: pleaze enter

    I don't think there's a problem with the grammar -- I think it's mostly spelling.

    i can find a lover
    i can find a friend
    i can have security
    until the bitter end
    anyone can comfort me
    with promises again
    but i don't want some
    pretty face to tell me
    pretty lies
    all i want is someone
    to believe
    honesty is such a lonely word
    every one is so untrue
    honesty is hardly ever heard
    but mostly what i need
    from you

    It's also usual to write a capital letter at the beginning of each line, and of course the word "I" is always spelled with a capital letter -- but in poetry, you're allowed to break some rules. Also, some punctuation might make it easier to read, but again, in poetry you can break the rules.

    Being allowed to break the rules in poetry is called "poetic licence".

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    Thank u sooo much for this useful reply
    I'm waiting for more replies

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    Question to the native speakers.....
    pleaze tell me
    Do u think that this poem is well written?

    pleaze
    tell me with a full of explanation

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