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    Topic: Everyone has different opinions about what makes someone a good parent. What three qualities do you think are most necessary to be a good parent? Why are these qualities important? Discuss, giving examples
    "What makes a good parent?"- You ask. Everyone has different opinions about their own dream parent with their loging personalities. But to me, three qualities which makes someone a good parent are: considerate, easy going and versatile.
    The first quality is indispensable: thoughtful. For example: My father is always away on business. For this reason, he does not have time to care much for me. However, whenever he is back after a long strip, he asks me about my grade at school, my friends, teachers and so on. On days he stays at home, he cooks for me, cleans the house and does the disc- wasing. he always makes me think of being a good father like him in the future. Considerate is a good characteristic that every so called" good parent" has to have- I believe- because it makes your children feel close to you. However, too much of this quality spoils your child.
    A good parent has to be versatile too. Children are eager to learn much from their parents, so it does help when those parents can teach them something interesting and/or useful for their future. A 30-year-old father can teach his young son how to play soccer while a mother might teach her daughter how to cook or do the needlework. By and large, good parent must know a lot of things to teach and have fun with their children.
    One last but not least quality of a good parent is easy going. Everyone knows that too much of this can easily spoil the best children but a limited amount will do. For instance, allowing your child to go out with his friend is not bad as long as he returns home before the curfew. This characteristic makes children comfortable with their parents and their friends altogether. But if he/she crosses the line, he/she deserves a punishment.
    So to speak, a good parent has to be thoughtful, versatile and easy going. However, knowing where the line is is the most important proposition that a good parent has to know. If his/her children crosses that line, the parents have to give a hard time for those obstinate kids.

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    Quote Originally Posted by belly_ttt View Post
    "What makes a good parent?"- You ask. Everyone has different opinions about their own dream parent with their loging [???] personalities. But to me, three qualities which makes someone a good parent are: considerate, easy going and versatile.[as qualities, these should be the nouns]
    The first quality is indispensable: thoughtful.[That is not the word used before - you need consistency] For example: My father is always away on business. For this reason, he does not have time to care much for me. However, whenever he is back after a long trip, he asks me about my grade at school, my friends, teachers and so on. On days he stays at home, he cooks for me, cleans the house and does the dish-washing [Colloquially - "washing up"]. He always makes me think of being a good father like him in the future. Considerate [Use the noun form] is a good characteristic that every so-called" good parent" has to have - I believe- because it makes your children feel close to you. However, too much of this quality spoils your child.
    A good parent has to be versatile too. Children are eager to learn much from their parents, so it does help when those parents can teach them something interesting and/or useful for their future. A 30-year-old father can teach his young son how to play soccer while a mother might teach her daughter how to cook or do the needlework. By and large, good parent [a good parent/good parents] must know a lot of things to teach and have fun with their children.
    The last but not least quality of a good parent is easy going ["to be easy going". Everyone knows that too much of this can easily spoil the best children but a limited amount will do. For instance, allowing your child to go out with his friend is not bad as long as he returns home before the curfew. This characteristic makes children comfortable with their parents and their friends altogether. But if he/she crosses the line, he/she deserves a punishment.
    So to speak, a good parent has to be thoughtful [consistency!], versatile and easy going. However, knowing where the line is ][to avoid the double "is", try "where the boundaries lie/are"] is the most important proposition that a good parent has to know. If his/her children crosses that line, the parents have to give those obstinate kids a hard time.
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