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    Hi there,
    can you proofread this sentence?

    As online possibilities grow, the scope for harm also increases. Virtual bonds will further alienate humans physically from each other.

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    Re: proofread

    Grammatically it looks fine but you could change it slightly to "further physically alienate..."

    What do you mean by "virtual bonds"?

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    Re: proofread

    Hi there,

    I don't understand what 'virtual bonds' is either. I think the writer wanted to mean the connection between people through internet but the bonds are not real ones, but virtual (through internet). Am I correct? OR any words to replace 'virtual bonds'?

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    Re: proofread

    That makes sense and is probably a good choice of words. Virtual is a common word for things on the internet like virtual reality. It looks real but it's not.

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