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    Inflation and Unemployment

    Please, proofread and correct where necessary.
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    Rise in the inflation in 2004 through 2006 was mostly attributable to the rise of:
    - social expenditures of the budget compared to goods offer.
    - housing and utilities infrastructure rate.
    - grocery output costs, heating systems and city transport infrastructure stimulated by fuel and oil price rising.

    Most of employed population accounting for 60% is involved in business, nearly 27% working on enterprises and organizations owned by the government or a city. The rest population is working at companies with foreign investments or joint companies. Nearly 0.6 million of people are working in small-size businesses.

    Unemployment rate, measured in accordance with the International Labor Organization standards, was 150 thousand of people. 17.3 thousand of people are registered for Placement service. By 2009, based on predictions the two figures will rose within 12%.

    Over the last years Saint-Petersburg has strengthened its position as the financial center in North-West of Russia. By the number of lending organizations the city is ranked second in the Russian Federation behind Moscow. Ended 2007, 50 lending organizations are operating in the city, notably: (43 banks, 7 loan associations), 114 offices of Banks based in other cities and 24 foreign banks.
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    Re: Please, proofread and redone where necessary.

    The rise in the inflation in 2004 through 2006 was mostly attributable to the rise of:
    - social expenditures of the budget compared to goods offer.
    - housing and utilities infrastructure rate.
    - grocery output costs, heating systems and city transport infrastructure stimulated by fuel and oil price rising.
    (Choose economic terms, but I think cost of food is your intent.)
    Most of employed population accounting for 60% is involved in business,
    nearly 27% working on enterprises and organizations owned by the
    (Sixty percent of the employed population is involved in business, while nearly twenty seven percent works on enterprises... )
    government or a city. The rest population is working at companies with foreign investments or joint companies. Nearly 0.6 million of people are working in small-size businesses.
    (The difference between "business" and "companies with foreign investments or joint companies" is not clear. Do you want to discuss domestic and foreign business?)

    Unemployment rate, measured in accordance with the International Labor Organization standards, was 150 thousands of people. 17.3 thousands of people are registered for Placement service. By 2009, based on predictions the two figures will rose within 12%.
    (simple future tense : figures will rise
    what is meaning of "within"? if the increase is 12% , we say "will rise by 12%" if we expect less than 12 % we say "nearly 12%" )

    Over the last years Saint-Petersburg has strengthened its position as the
    (Years is a counting noun. How many years? We use numbers, and we use words like "couple of", "few", "several", and "many" . Your phrase suggests a small number, less than ten. You need to use "Over the last counting word years." Do not use "counting word". Replace with correct word.)
    financial center in North-West of Russia. By the number of lending organizations the city is ranked second in the Russian Federation behind Moscow. Ended 2007, 50 lending organizations are operating in the city, notably: (43 banks, 7 loan associations), 114 offices of Banks based in other cities and 24 foreign banks.
    (parenthesis not necessary (43 banks, 7 loan associations.) just omit parenthesis. all words correct.)

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    Re: Please, proofread and correct where necessary.

    Quote Originally Posted by GaryEM View Post
    The rise in the inflation in 2004 through 2006 was mostly attributable to the rise of:
    - social expenditures of the budget compared to goods offer.
    - housing and utilities infrastructure rate.
    - grocery output costs, heating systems and city transport infrastructure stimulated by fuel and oil price rising.
    (Choose economic terms, but I think cost of food is your intent.)
    Can I use here “food production costs”. I need to indicate the inflation rising was fueled by the increase in manufacturing/ production costs. Cost = The expenditure of something, such as time or labor, necessary for the attainment of a goal = the total spent for goods or services including money and time and labor
    huge thanks for helping me.

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    Re: Please, proofread and redone where necessary.

    "I need to indicate the inflation rising was fueled by the increase in manufacturing/ production costs."

    After your reply, I understand your intent. "cost of food" does not mean that. You are correct to use "food production costs". The phrase "cost of producing food" is the same meaning. I like your phrase better.

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    Re: Please, proofread and redone where necessary.

    Say:
    the rise in the inflation rate.

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    Re: Please, proofread and redone where necessary.

    Quote Originally Posted by Sandersru View Post
    Unemployment rate, measured in accordance with the International Labor Organization standards, was 150 thousand of people. 17.3 thousand of people are registered for Placement service. By 2009, based on predictions the two figures will rose within 12%.
    The unemployment rate, measured in accordance with the International Labor Organization standards, was 150,000. 17,300 people are registered with the Placement Service. By 2009, based on predictions, the two figures will rise by 12%.
    Quote Originally Posted by Sandersru View Post
    Over the last years Saint-Petersburg has strengthened its position as the financial center in North-West of Russia. By the number of lending organizations the city is ranked second in the Russian Federation behind Moscow. Ended 2007, 50 lending organizations are operating in the city, notably: (43 banks, 7 loan associations), 114 offices of Banks based in other cities and 24 foreign banks.
    Over the last few years, Saint-Petersburg has strengthened its position as the financial center in the northwest of Russia. In the total number of lending organizations the city is ranked second in the Russian Federation behind Moscow. Ending in 2007, 50 lending organizations are operating in the city, notably: (43 banks, 7 loan associations), 114 offices of Banks based in other cities and 24 foreign banks.

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