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    NewHope is offline Senior Member
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    Default A small paragraph needs editing

    his style is unique, and his art pieces are natural, rich in charm, with disturbance in peace, splendour in leisure.

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    Tdol is offline Editor, UsingEnglish.com
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    with disturbance in peace,

    This phrase doesn't work for me. If the pieces are not relaxing to the eye, you could say they are 'provocative'. Who is the artist?

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    Hehe, drop it then.

    Thanks for the comment.

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