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    popsie is offline Junior Member
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    Composition (essay)

    Hi,

    pls. could you check my composition. Thanks very much in advance.

    Museums are a waste of money

    In today’s world, the museum is a place, in which one can understand the future in a better way, learning from the past. Museums protect the cultural heritage of the country.

    Some people claim that subsidise museums is unnecessary. These people believe that when one studies history from the Internet, one saves his money and time, as well as, taxpayer‘s money. Furthermore, the entrance fees are quite high to a very well-known museums, so that the students or young people could hardly allow to buy a ticket.

    However, other people believe that this opinion is in error. If one wishes to know history well, it is much better when one has possibility to physically interact with historical objects. The exhibitions should be made as lively and interesting as possible to captivate a lot of people.

    To sum up, it seems to me that museums are really useful and should be maintained, even thought it costs plenty of money.

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    Re: Composition (essay)

    Quote Originally Posted by popsie View Post
    Hi,

    pls. could you check my composition. Thanks very much in advance.

    Museums are a waste of money

    In today’s world, the museum is a place in which one can understand the future in a better way by learning from the past. Museums protect the cultural heritage of the country.

    Some people claim that subsidise [subsidising/to subsidise] museums is unnecessary. These people [They] believe that when one studies history from the Internet, one saves his money and time [money and time are saved], as well as taxpayers' money. Furthermore, the entrance fees are quite high for very well-known museums, so that students or young people could can hardly allow [afford] to buy a ticket.

    However, other people believe that this opinion is in errorerroneous. If one wishes to know history well, it is much better when one has the possibility to physically interact with historical objects. Exhibitions should be made as lively and interesting as possible to captivate a lot of people.

    To sum up, it seems to me that museums are really useful and should be maintained, even thought it costs plenty [a great deal] of money.
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    popsie is offline Junior Member
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    Re: Composition (essay)

    Hi Anglika,

    thanks so much for helping me. I really appreciate it.

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