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    Default three titles need editing

    Part of members of Olympic delegation return home with honor

    Eccentric rides shoe-bicycle around China at large

    (shoe-bicycle: in text author will introduce that the weird man modified his bicycle like a shoe, and he has been riding on it to take a trip around the whole China to collect the shoes from 56 peoples in the nation, in order of "save the unique shoes-culture of China)

    Jiangcheng's first man-made beauty appears

    (Here "beauty" means "a beautiful woman", have you got at the first sight at the title?)

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    Default Re: three titles need editing

    What about?

    Olympic delegates return home with honor

    You could also use committee or athletes?

    Shoe-bicycle eccentric rides all over China

    Jiangcheng reveals Beauty

    Jiangcheng reveals his beauty

    All the best, :D

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    I especially appreciated the second title.

    You know that Athens OG is ongoing yet. There are some Olympic delegates which return home with honor. The title "Olympic delegates return home with honor " seems to me, like that all delegates return home.

    Jiangcheng is a city, while a "man-made beauty" means that the beauty originally was not pretty, even was ugly. With the help of plastic surgeons, she underwent some cosmetic surgeries and became especially pretty. In China, she is called a man-made beauty.

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    Quote Originally Posted by NewHope
    I especially appreciated the second title.
    It sounds like a very interesting story. 8)

    You know that Athens OG is ongoing yet. There are some Olympic delegates which return home with honor. The title "Olympic delegates return home with honor " seems to me, like that all delegates return home.
    'delegates' is OK. It could mean all or some.

    Jiangcheng is a city, while a "man-made beauty" means that the beauty originally was not pretty, even was ugly. With the help of plastic surgeons, she underwent some cosmetic surgeries and became especially pretty. In China, she is called a man-made beauty.[/quote]

    Ah, I see. The city underwent beautification, right? Wow. :D What about?

    Jiangcheng reveals its true beauty

    All the best, :D

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    [quote="Casiopea"]
    Quote Originally Posted by NewHope

    Ah, I see. The city underwent beautification, right? Wow. :D What about?

    Jiangcheng reveals its true beauty

    All the best, :D
    My God, please take a look at the thread. I have noted that:

    (Here "beauty" means "a beautiful woman", have you got at the first sight at the title?)

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    [quote="NewHope"]
    Quote Originally Posted by Casiopea
    Quote Originally Posted by NewHope

    Ah, I see. The city underwent beautification, right? Wow. :D What about?

    Jiangcheng reveals its true beauty

    All the best, :D
    My God, please take a look at the thread. I have noted that:

    (Here "beauty" means "a beautiful woman", have you got at the first sight at the title?)
    I'm so confused. :? Is Jiangcheng a city or a woman?

    Quote Originally Posted by New Hope
    Jiangcheng is a city
    Quote Originally Posted by New Hope
    Here "beauty" means "a beautiful woman"
    By the way, some people might take offense to "My God". :wink:

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    See my original title:

    Jiangcheng's first man-made beauty appears

    It means:

    First man-made beautiful woman of Jiangcheng City appears

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    Quote Originally Posted by NewHope
    See my original title:

    Jiangcheng's first man-made beauty appears

    It means:

    First man-made beautiful woman of Jiangcheng City appears
    Ok, so, 'First man-made...woman' means, the first woman to undergo cosmetic surgery (in Jiangcheng City), right? Ok. I got it. :D

    What about?

    Cosmetically enhanced beauty: A first for Jiangcheng

    All the best, :D

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    Default Hmm, I wonder

    If the title could catch a reader's eye in no time? Because almost every woman today wants to enhance their beauty, for example, to recieve the simple surgery of double eye -- so they could all be called cosmetically enhanced beauty?

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