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    Please check my paragraph writing

    sir
    please check my paragraph writing and right paragraph under my paragraph

    thank you





    The major focus of this work is to explain how University is developing a data warehouse application to deliver timely, accurate student information to University customers. This Thesis will benefit anyone who wishes to serve academic customers by providing a PC database environment for working with existing data. Two underlying factors led to the development of this application. A more timely method for delivering reports to University management is needed at a time when Information Services (IS) staffs resources are diminish. The server-based Student Information System presents information on an individual student basis; whereas, University often needs to view student information in an aggregate form by university, department, degrees, semester, course, or advisor. This application is designed to empower the customer to design and create reports and queries based on their individual needs with the ultimate outcome being an improved service to students.



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    Re: Please check my paragraph writing

    to explain how University is developing

    how this University
    or
    how universities are

    Two underlying factors led to the development of this application
    It is difficult to distinguish what these two distinct factors are from what comes next. Perhaps you could write,
    Firstly, the need for a more timely..
    Secondly,

    whereas, the University often needs

    on their individual needs, with the ultimate outcome being..

    Note re 'reports to University management'
    We do write eg he reports directly to management ( no definite article) and so I wouldn't put one here, as opposed to other places I've indicated.
    Your command of English and fluency in writing is very impressive!


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    Exclamation Re: Please check my paragraph writing

    thank you for your reply

    1.
    sir i replace as per your given idea

    how universities are developing


    2.
    sir if i replace

    Two important factors are the development of this application.

    with

    Two underlying factors led to the development of this application

    what your suggestion

    3.

    'reports to University management'

    Sir which article I use here
    can you give me idea
    write any sample please

    thank you







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    Re: Please check my paragraph writing

    Replace :Two important factors are the development of this application.
    with
    Two underlying factors led to the development of this application

    What is your suggestion?

    On second reading, I agree with you - I don't like 'important' in this sentence!
    The reason I changed 'underlying': because of my particular professional training perhaps, this word suggests factors and reasons not readily apparent. For example, take a piece of behaviour like a man buying a red sports car. OK. So he bought a new car, and it happened to be red, and a sports car. But an underlying reason for his choice might be, he is starting to feeling old, that his youth is past, and that by buying a sporty car, he might still seem to people as 'young' and 'with it'.
    From what you write, it was not really 'underlying factors' , but 'two main reasons why' it was developed.
    Another suggestion then:

    Two key factors prompted the development of this application.

    If you prefer 'underlying', I doubt if most people would consider it an odd use in this context by any means.

    A more timely method for delivering reports to University management is needed
    I now gather that this software is to be sold to as many universities as possible, so we are not talking about one university. (I thought you might be writing a report to the management of the university where you work).
    A more timely method for delivering reports to Management at universities is needed.
    (the use of a capital letter for 'management' raises this from the ordinary use/meaning of the word, into more of a proper name. Compare:
    'mathematics' versus 'Mathematics Department'
    Last edited by David L.; 27-Mar-2008 at 09:33.


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    Re: Please check my paragraph writing

    now sir you see

    The major focus of this work is to explain how universities are developing a data warehouse application to deliver timely, accurate student information to their customers. This Thesis will benefit anyone who wishes to serve academic customers by providing a PC database environment for working with existing data. Two underlying factors led to the development of this application. A more timely method for delivering reports to Management at universities is needed at a time when Information Services (IS) staffs resources are diminish. The server-based Student Information System presents information on an individual student basis; whereas, University often needs to view student information in an aggregate form by university, department, degrees, semester, course, or advisor. This application is designed to empower the customer to design and create reports and queries based on their individual needs, with the ultimate outcome being an improved service to students.

    if you give any other suggestion please write blow

    thank


    aamir

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    Re: Please check my paragraph writing

    IS THIS A PROPOSAL? IF SO, I SUGGEST:


    The major focus of this work is to explain how universities will be able to develop a data warehouse application to deliver timely, accurate student information to their customers. This Thesis will benefit anyone who wishes to serve academic customers by providing a PC database environment for working with existing data. Two underlying factors led to the development of this application. (1) A more timely method for delivering reports to Management at universities was needed as Information Services (IS) staff resources started to diminish. (2) The server-based Student Information System presented information on an individual student basis; whereas, University now need to view student information in an aggregate form by university, department, degrees, semester, course, or advisor. This application is designed to empower the customer to design and create reports and queries based on the University's individual needs, with the ultimate outcome resulting in improved services to its students.


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    Question Re: Please check my paragraph writing

    sir
    Please check these material also an correct.

    No check code check only my description that I wrote
    1.)

    Table
    Table is a set of data elements that is organized in row and column the columns. The columns are identified by name is called field, and the row are identified by value appearing in particulars column subset is call record. Every tables link with each other by candidate key.

    Create Degreedim table


    This flowing code create
    DEGREEDIM table that saved the department and degree information

    CODE :

    CREATE TABLE DEGREEDIM
    ( "DEGDEPT" VARCHAR2(99 BYTE), "DEGSNO" NUMBER NOT NULL ENABLE, "DEGNAME" VARCHAR2(99 BYTE),


    ******************************

    2.)

    Constraint
    Constraint are table attribute used to define rules on the type of data value allowed within specified column by enforcing these rules within the database, you restrict to a user against incorrect data being added to the database.

    ********************
    3.)

    Sequence
    A sequence is an object in oracle that is use to generate a number sequence, that sequence provide the unique number for primary key


    MDEG SequenceThis flowing code generate the unique number sequencecodeREM START MFAFORBI MDEGCREATE SEQUENCE "MFAFORBI"."MDEG" MINVALUE 1 MAXVALUE 999999999999999999999999999 INCREMENT BY 1 START WITH 41 CACHE 20 NOORDER NOCYCLE ;REM END MFAFORBI MDEG


    *********************************
    4.)

    Trigger
    Trigger is special kind of stored procedure that execute automatically, when a user attempt the specified insertion, update, or delete statement.
    There are two type of trigger.

    • Before (run before table affection)
    • After (run after table affection)


    Create
    DTTR Trigger

    This flowing code gets a unique number from Mdeg sequence that use as primary key in
    DEGREEDIM table.

    CODE :

    CREATE OR REPLACE TRIGGER "MFAFORBI"."DTTR"
    BEFORE INSERT ON DEGREEDIM FOR EACH ROW BEGINSELECT MDEG.NEXTVAL INTO :NEW.DEGSNO FROM DUAL;END;





    thank you


    aamir



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