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    gx90t is offline Junior Member
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    Default Can you correct my reply?Thank you!!!=)=)

    This is the letter I have to reply to:

    Guess what? Red Stone are going to be giving a concert at the City Stadium on Saturday 21 July. What about us going to see them together? I know you're a great fun of theirs, but I don't really know anything about them.

    I can get tickets if I book them this week. The ticket price depends on whether we sit or stand -could you let me know which you would prefer? Why don't we meet outside the City Stadium at 7 p.m.?

    You could stay the night at my flat, as it's bigger than my old one. We could do something together the next day. Is there anything special you'd like to do?

    That's the reply I write down:
    Hi Kim!
    I'm very glad of hearing about you!Surely we can go together at the concert on Saturday 21 July.
    I thought that you are interested in "Red Stone" too, but your questions suggest me that I was wrong.
    I'll tell you something about them immediately, because, as you say, I'm a great fun of them.
    The band plays different kind of music above all rock,and this is their last concert in our country, then they're travelling around the world and they hope their music could be succesfull.

    At concerts normally I love standing in the crowd, because you can move and dance,if you want,and not just only listen to the music.
    But if you prefer sitting down,that's all right for me!

    About the time we can meet I think is better at 4 p.m. instead of 7 p.m.,as you write me down in your letter.
    What do you think?

    I would be thankful with you for your offer of standing the night at your flat and it would be great spending the next day together,as you suggest.
    What do you think of staying at home at speaking and relaxing the whole day?

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    gx90t is offline Junior Member
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    Default Re: Can you correct my reply?Thank you!!!=)=)

    Is there nothing to do with me and above all my english??

    Is this reply such a disaster??

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    Default Re: Can you correct my reply?Thank you!!!=)=)

    I think this can help:

    I'm very glad of hearing about you! We can surely be together at the concert on Saturday 21 July.

    Kim says that he has no information around them not to keep himself away from Red Stone concert! This means perhaps he likes them but not as you're standing for them. So that the sentence below should have been omitted!

    I thought that you are interested in "Red Stone" too, but your questions suggest me that I was wrong.

    I really am a tough fun of them as you know that this gives me a motif to be going to tell you something about them immediately.

    The band plays different kind of music, that's all rock, and it will be the last concert they've got in our country. I mean they're travelling around the world with hopping that their music could aggregate many amateurs.

    At the concerts, normally, I love standing in the crowd because you can move and dance besides you're listening to the music!

    But if you prefer sitting down, that's all right for me!
    About time of having the meeting it's better to be at 4 p.m. instead of 7 p.m. What do you think?

    I would be thankful to you for your offer of standing the night at your flat and it's gonna be great to spend the next day together.

    What do you think about staying home at speaking and relaxing the whole day?
    Thank you!

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