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    Bassim is offline Senior Member
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    A Rock

    Dear people.
    Here is my new poem, please would you help me and proofread it

    A Rock

    The empty street.

    A car or a bicycle pass by now and then.

    It reminds me of a state of emergency

    during the war in my hometown.

    What is missing are the rattle of machine gun

    and a bomb exploding now and then.


    Block of flats inhabited by neighbours

    who seldom talk to each other.

    Instead, they watch TV, surf the Net.

    Keeping distance,

    is an established custom in this place.


    My tragedy,

    I have become one of them,

    avoiding people as much as I can,

    sitting in my prison flat,

    the peephole of the doors my closest friend.


    Am I still a human

    or a body without will,

    a prisoner of the past.

    Why must I become a rock in order to survive?

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    Re: A Rock

    Quote Originally Posted by Bassim View Post
    Dear people.
    Here is my new poem, please would you help me and proofread it

    A Rock

    The empty street.

    A car or a bicycle pass by now and then.

    It reminds me of a state of emergency

    during the war in my hometown.

    What is missing are/is the rattle of machine gun

    and a bomb exploding now and then.


    Block of flats inhabited by neighbours

    who seldom talk to each other.

    Instead, they watch TV, surf the Net.

    Keeping distance,

    is an established custom in this place.


    My tragedy,

    I have become one of them,

    avoiding people as much as I can,

    sitting in my prison flat,

    the peephole of the doors my closest friend.


    Am I still a human

    or a body without will,

    a prisoner of the past.

    Why must I become a rock in order to survive?
    Just a slight change.

    Regards Stilo

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