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    Topic: my favorite websites

    I go on the Internet everyday for at least two hours. I started going on the Internet in November of 1999. I have been to many websites, and my favorite websites are www.neopets.com and www.usingenglish.com.

    www.neopets.com is a website that offers a lot of games and an online pet to take care of. My favorite game is Snow Muncher. It testes my IQ and EQ, and it is a very difficult game. I play it at least three times a week. In addition, I think that the website is very cool that I told all my friends about it.

    Another website that I really enjoy visiting is www.usingenglish.com. I visit that website everyday because it answers all my English grammar problems and questions. Not only that, it is a website that I can find help in editing my essays and improving my English. I think that the administrators on www.usingenglish.com are very nice. For instance, they reply to my posts and messages as soon as possible and no later than two days. Also they never leave a post with no replies.

    There are other website that I visits everyday, for instance, www.yahoo.com. However, I think those other websites are not as entertaining and educational compared to my two favorite websites. I recommend www.usingenglish.com and www.neopets.com to all my friends and relatives.

    >>>>>i have a question did i start the second paragraph correctly. or do i have to have the first letter capitalized ( would be very awkward if i did).

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    Quote Originally Posted by gonghai
    Topic: my favorite websites

    I go on the Internet everyday for at least two hours. I started going on the Internet in November of (do you need the proposition here?)1999. I have been to many websites, and my favorite websites are www.neopets.com and www.usingenglish.com.

    www.neopets.com is a website that offers a lot of games and an online pet to take care of. My favorite game is Snow Muncher. It tests my IQ and EQ, and it is a very difficult game. I play it at least three times a week. In addition, I think that the website is very cool that I told all my friends about it.

    Another website that I really enjoy visiting is www.usingenglish.com. I visit that website everyday because it answers all my English grammar problems and questions. Not only that, it is a website where I can find help in editing my essays and improving my English. I think that the administrators on www.usingenglish.com are very nice. For instance, they reply to my posts and messages as soon as possible and no later than two days. Also they never leave a post with no replies.

    There are other website that I visits everyday, for instance, www.yahoo.com. However, I think those other websites are not as entertaining and educational compared to my two favorite websites. I recommend www.usingenglish.com and www.neopets.com to all my friends and relatives.

    >>>>>i have a question did i start the second paragraph correctly. or do i have to have the first letter capitalized ( would be very awkward if i did).
    I'd leave it like that- Www. looks stsrange. You could avoid the issue by using a phrase like 'A site I like is www.neopets.com


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    thanks tdol

    your editing helped me a lot. one thing that i am really happy right now is i have passed my LPI exam and that means that i can continue my studies.

    once again thanks tdol and all other usingenglish.com adminstrators.
    thanks guys

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