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    Default Aisha and Murad-part four, Short story

    Please would you proofread the fourth part of my short story:

    Aisha decided that they should visit his mother and together explain to her how much they loved each other. After all, his mother's flat was only a few kilometres from hers and they could visit each other as much as they wanted.
    Aisha knew what an old Turkish woman appreciated the most and she went into the store and bought three kilogram of best coffee beans, and then some meters of cotton and silk fabric so that the old lady could sew her own curtains and bedspreads. In the same parcel she also put an expensive pearl necklace which she had bought the last time she visited Morocco.

    His mother Halima was overjoyed when she saw her, rebuking his son why she did not come earlier and show her his beautiful girl friend. She looked at the gifts with her sharp eyes feeling with her plump fingers the surface of the fabric and telling to Aisha that such a good silk she did not see for years. She did not miss to make them a strong Turkish coffee and describe for Aisha how much she still was missing her husband.

    Finally, it was decided that Murad should move into her flat, which she did, carrying with him two big sport bags. They had the best time of their lives; they would woke up late in the morning, eat breakfast and make love. Sometimes they would stroll together in the nearby forest or just sit on the bench and enjoy the sun. Aisha would travel with her air company and return with new gifts. When she asked Murad about his job, he told her she was on sick leave. Already the first time when they met when she asked about his occupation he answered that he was self-employed. Something within IT. She did not ask him too much, she did not want to appear too inquisitive. She knew well that the majority of the men did not like curious women. However, she did not see anything which will prove the truth of his words. True, he had a laptop but the only time he had been using it it was when he played computer games.

    Once she noticed that some of the money she used to keep in a chest of drawers was missing. It was not big sums but she did not like it. She believed that Murad was without money but was too proud to ask her to give him some. Maybe he went outside to drink with his friends when she was away. To appear stingy was one of the greatest sins among all immigrants. She decided to keep silent and see what was going to happen next. There was one more thing which she did not like at all. When Murad went shopping food she gave him money he needed for that, but he never gave her the rest. When she asked him to show her the receipt he said he had lost it, grinned and fluttered his long eyelashes at her.

    She was angry and wanted to slap him but as soon as they ended up in bed and she felt his strong arms around her limbs she would have forgiven him everything.

    To be continued.
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    Default Re: Aisha and Murad-part four, Short story

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    Please would you proofread the fourth part of my short story:

    Aisha decided suggested that they should visit his mother and together explain to her how much they loved each other. After all, his mother's flat was only a few kilometres from hers and they could visit each other as much as they wanted.
    Aisha knew what an old Turkish woman appreciated the most and she went to the store and bought three kilograms of the best coffee beans, and then some meters of cotton and silk fabric so that the old lady could sew her own curtains and bedspreads. In the same parcel she also put an expensive pearl necklace which she had bought the last time she visited Morocco.

    His mother Halima was overjoyed when she saw her, rebuking his son why she did not come earlier and show her his beautiful girl friend.for not bringing this beautiful girl to meet her sooner. She looked at the gifts with her sharp eyes, feeling with her plump fingers the surface of the fabric and telling to Aisha that such a good silk she did not see for years.Aisha that she had not seen such good silk for years. She did not miss to make made them a strong Turkish coffee and told Aisha how much she still was missing her husband.

    Finally, it was decided that Murad should move into her flat, which he did, bringing with him two big sport bags. They had the best time of their lives; they would wake up late in the morning, eat breakfast and make love. Sometimes they would stroll together in the nearby forest or just sit on the bench and enjoy the sun. Aisha would travel with her air company and return with new gifts. When she asked Murad about his job, he told her she was on sick leave. The first time when they met when they met, she asked about his occupation and he had answered that he was self-employed. Something within IT. She did not ask him too much, she did not want to appear too inquisitive. She knew well that the majority of the men did not like curious women. However, she did not see anything which will prove the truth of his words. True, he had a laptop but the only time he had been using used it it was when he played computer games.

    One day she noticed that some of the money she used to keep in a chest of drawers was missing. It was not a big sum but she did not like it. She believed that Murad was without money but was too proud to ask her to give him some. Maybe he went outside to drink with his friends when she was away. To appear stingy was one of the greatest sins among all immigrants. She decided to keep silent and see what was going to happen next. There was one more thing which she did not like at all. When Murad went shopping for food, she gave him the money he needed for that, but he never gave her the change. When she asked him to show her the receipt, he said he had lost it, grinned and fluttered his long eyelashes at her.

    She was angry and wanted to slap him but as soon as they ended up in bed and she felt his strong arms around her limbs she forgave him everything.

    To be continued.
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    Anglika

    Thank you very much for helping me.
    Have a nice day!

    Bassim

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