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    Any suggestions?

    Hello,

    The symptoms may differ from person to person. Not everyone will have all the same symptoms. Some people experience a few symptoms and some many symptoms. The severity of symptoms also varies with individuals.

    Any suggestions to abridge the above paragraph?

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    Re: Any suggestions?

    Quote Originally Posted by Abusaad
    Hello,

    The symptoms may differ from person to person. Not everyone will have all the same symptoms. Some people experience a few symptoms and some many symptoms. The severity of symptoms also varies with individuals.

    Any suggestions to abridge the above paragraph?

    The symptoms vary from one person to another in their intensity, number and severity.


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    Thanks Natalie27. Excellent suggestion.
    Anyone else, please?


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    #4
    Natalie27's sentence is excellent IMO.
    One could save a few words, if that matters, with:
    The symptoms, and their severity, are patient dependent.
    You lose information; but I think it keeps the core meaning.

    FRC

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