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    Default A Heartquake Chase

    Pls help to correct the mistakes in my essay, thanks

    The famous street was almost empty while the jewellery shop was opening. Mr. Taylor, the owner of the jewellery shop, was admiring a new window display which had only just been finished by two of his staffs. After gazing the display for several minutes, Mr. Taytor went back into his shop.
    The silence was suddenly broken when a large car, with its headlights on and its horn blaring, roared down and came to stop outside the shop. Two men jumped out and smashed the window with iron bars. While this was going on, Mr. Taylor and his staff were upstairs and began to throw furniture out of window to hit the thieves. The thieves were too busy to notice any pain while helping themselves to diamonds. The raid was all over in three minutes. The two thieves crambled back into the car and took off at a high speed.
    Mr. Taylor ran downstairs and took a taxi to follow the thieves. Though the thieve drove the car at a mad speed, the taxi driver alway followed. Suddenly an alarm whistle came from a police car behind the taxi, the police instructed the taxi driver to stop because of its overspeed.
    Ten minutes after Mr. Taylor explained the situation to the police, the thieve's car was found, but it was empty. The thieves abandoned the car and escaped on foot with thousands of pounds worth of diamonds.
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    Quote Originally Posted by wuwei View Post


    The famous street was almost empty while the jewellery shop was opening. Mr. Taylor, the owner of the jewellery shop, was admiring a new window display which had just been finished by two of his employees. After gazing at the display for several minutes, Mr. Taytor went back into his shop.
    The silence was suddenly broken when a large car, with its headlights on and its horn blaring, roared to a stop outside the shop.
    The thieves wanted to call attention to themselves?
    Quote Originally Posted by wuwei View Post
    Two men jumped out of the car and smashed the window with iron bars. While this was going on, Mr. Taylor and his staff were upstairs and threw throw furniture out of the window to hit the thieves.
    What were Mr. Taylor and his staff doing upstairs?

    Quote Originally Posted by wuwei View Post
    The thieves were too busy to notice any pain while helping themselves to diamonds.
    You can get hit by a chair and not notice?

    Quote Originally Posted by wuwei View Post
    The raid was all over in three minutes. The two thieves scrambled back into the car and took off at high speed. Mr. Taylor ran downstairs and took a taxi to follow the thieves.
    He didn't think to call the police? What was the cab doing there?

    Quote Originally Posted by wuwei View Post
    Though the thieve drove the car at a mad speed, the taxi driver alway followed.
    Though the robbers drove the car very fast, the taxi driver was able to keep up.
    Quote Originally Posted by wuwei View Post
    Suddenly an alarm whistle came from a police car behind the taxi, the police instructed the taxi driver to stop because it was going too fast. Ten minutes after Mr. Taylor explained the situation to the police, the getaway car was found, but it was empty. The thieves had abandoned the car and escaped on foot with thousands of pounds worth of diamonds.
    When a police siren goes off that is itself a signal to stop your car.


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    Default Re: A Heartquake Chase

    Thanks, Ronbee,
    I just imitated an English essay and didn't concern whether it was true.
    Your comments are very logistic, I should pay more attention to it.
    Thanks again!

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    Here is a link to Dictionary.com:
    Please note the distinction between thief and robber.

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