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    Default Could you proofread the text, please?

    About popular sports in Australia!

    I'd like to give you some information on popular sports in Australia.
    Aussie football and cricket, which are called footy, are quite popular among Australian people.

    The national sports of Australia are...
    Aussie football, rugby and surfing.
    The formal name of Aussie football is "Australian rules football."
    And there are two kinds of rugby codes(???)- Rugby League and Rugby union.

    The sports with a high rating are....
    No1... Aussie football.
    No2... Horse race
    Melbourne Cup, which is a major annual thoroughbred horse race, had a remarkably high audience rating.
    No3... Car race

    Many Australians get involved in sports through sports clubs or sports associations.
    23.5% Australians over the age of 15 regularly participate in organized sporting activities.
    At an international level, Australia has strong teams in cricket, hockey, netball, rugby league, and rugby union, and it performs well in cycling, rowing, and swimming.

    Additional information from Wikipedia(written in red) Australia - Wikipedia, the free encyclopedia



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    The original is below this post!!!
    Please read the original first!
    Thank you.
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    Default Re: Could you proofread the text, please?

    Quote Originally Posted by tzfujimino View Post
    About popular sports in Australia!

    I'd like to give you some information on popular sports in Australia.
    Aussie football and cricket, which are called footy, are quite popular among Australian people.

    The national sports of Australia are...
    Aussie football, rugby and surfing.
    The formal name of Aussie football is "Australian rules football."
    And there are two kinds of rugby codes(???)- Rugby League and Rugby union.

    The sports with a high rating are....
    No1... Aussie football.
    No2... Horse race
    Melbourne Cup, which is a major annual thoroughbred horse race, had a remarkably high audience rating.
    No3... Car race

    Many Australians get involved in sports through sports clubs or sports associations.
    23.5% Australians over the age of 15 regularly participate in organized sporting activities.
    At an international level, Australia has strong teams in cricket, hockey, netball, rugby league, and rugby union, and it performs well in cycling, rowing, and swimming.

    Additional information from Wikipedia(written in red) Australia - Wikipedia, the free encyclopedia

    The text in my previous post above was originally as follows :

    About Australian famous sports!

    I'll talk about Australian famous sports.
    The sport which is popular in Australia is Aussie football and the cricket which are called footy.

    First, about the Australian national sport.
    It is Aussie football, rugby and surfing.
    Aussie football is a formal name is Australian rule football.
    And there are two kinds of a Rugby League and Rugby union of Rugby of Australia.

    Second, most popular watching sport game.
    The first place is Aussie football.
    The second place is Horse race.
    Relay of Melbourne Capp of a horse is becomes remarkable high viewership.
    The third place is Car race.

    Third, about the sport performed in a team.
    As for many Australians, a sport participates through a sports club or a sport association.
    The most popular sport in a team are cricket, rugby, and netball.



    It was written by one of my former students.(Now she's a 16-year-old high school student.) She sent me an e-mail saying,"I'm going to stay in Australia for two weeks. I have to make a speech about Australia in English in the next English class. I need your help!"
    "The next class" is the day after tomorrow, that is 21st of May!
    The text is really horrible. She apparently wrote it with the help of translation software.

    I don't know whether or not what she wrote is true.
    (I've actually consulted Wikipedia)
    She's just a beginner, so please forgive her if there's any wrong information in the text. It just has to be understandable to beginners like her.

    Thank you in advance.

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