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    Hi, teachers, could you pls correct the mistakes in the following essay and tell me whether the lighted word is proper, thanks
    Dogs are alway fiendly and loyal towards humans, they can be used either as watchdogs or as rescue dogs. When the hosts are in difficulty, their dogs always help them to get away from the dangerous situation.
    Bell, an skee enthusiast, once went to the top of a high mountain with his dog for his interest. The sky was blue and the air was very fresh. After having arrived the top of the mountain, Bell equipped himself and began to skate. The smart dog followed and enjoyed the whole intersting white snow. Suddenly, Bell fell over at a big stone and broke one of his leg. He felt a great painful and could not move any longer.
    His dog smelled its host and crooned, it ran away immediately and disappeared out of Bell's sight. Bell felt so silly and cold when the curtain of night came down.
    About one hour later, a torch light flashed about 5 kilometers aways and heard a dog barking. When the rescue team arrived the accident place, Bell found his smart dog had gone to the village nearby the mountain to lead people to rescue him.
    Since then, Bell loved his dog more.

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    Quote Originally Posted by wuwei View Post
    Hi, teachers, could you pls correct the mistakes in the following essay and tell me whether the lighted word is proper, thanks
    Dogs are alway fiendly and loyal towards humans, they can be used either as watchdogs or as rescue dogs. When the hosts are in difficulty, their dogs always help them to get away from the dangerous situation.
    Bell, an skee enthusiast, once went to the top of a high mountain with his dog for his interest. The sky was blue and the air was very fresh. After having arrived the top of the mountain, Bell equipped himself and began to skate. The smart dog followed and enjoyed the whole intersting white snow. Suddenly, Bell fell over at a big stone and broke one of his leg. He felt a great painful and could not move any longer.
    His dog smelled its host and crooned, it ran away immediately and disappeared out of Bell's sight. Bell felt so silly and cold when the curtain of night came down.
    About one hour later, a torch light flashed about 5 kilometers aways and heard a dog barking. When the rescue team arrived the accident place, Bell found his smart dog had gone to the village nearby the mountain to lead people to rescue him.
    Since then, Bell loved his dog more.
    Dogs are always friendly and loyal toward humans, they can be used either as watchdogs or rescue dogs. When the hosts are in difficulty, their dogs always help them to get out of the dangerous situation.
    Bell, an skeet enthusiast, once went to the top of a high mountain with his dog for his interest. The sky was blue and the air was very fresh. After having reached the top of the mountain, Bell equipped himself and began to skate. The smart dog followed and enjoyed the whole interesting white snow. Suddenly, Bell fell over at a big stone and broke one of his leg. He felt a great pain and could not move any longer.
    His dog smelled its host and
    crooned, it ran away immediately and disappeared out of Bell's sight. Bell felt so silly and cold when the curtain of night came down.
    About one hour later, a torch light flashed about 5 kilometers away and heard a dog barking. When the rescue team arrived at the accident place, Bell found his smart dog had gone to the village nearby the mountain to lead people to rescue him.
    Since then, Bell loved his dog more.


    I did the chances which I felt still i leave it for native speakers

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    Quote Originally Posted by wuwei View Post
    Hi, teachers, could you pls correct the mistakes in the following essay and tell me whether the highlighted word is proper, thanks


    Dogs are alway [not always - I would say "generally" or "usually"] friendly and loyal towards humans. They can be used either as watchdogs or as rescue dogs. When the hosts [people/ their owners] are in difficulty, their dogs always help them to get away from the dangerous situation.
    Bell, a ski enthusiast, once went to the top of a high mountain with his dog for his interesttaking his dog with him. The sky was blue and the air was very fresh. After having arrived the top of the mountain, Bell equipped himself and began to ski. The smart dog followed, enjoying the white snow. Suddenly, Bell fell over a big stone and broke one of his legs. He felt a great pain and could not move any longer.
    His dog smelled its owner and crooned,[howled ] then ran away immediately and disappeared out of Bell's sight. Bell felt so silly and cold as the curtain of night came down.
    About one hour later, a torch light flashed about 5 kilometers aways and heard a dog barking. someone heard the dog barking and followed it. When the rescue team arrived the accident place, Bell found his smart dog had gone to the village at the foot of the mountain to lead people to rescue him.
    Since then, Bell loves his dog more.
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