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    Default Creative writing...please correct grammar

    Democracy is

    Buy the people
    Far the people
    Off the people

    Our politicians are experts in earning

    Name, fame but without shame

    Indeed our citizens don’t believe in casting vote but to vote castes

    Our heart says ‘peace of society’ should prevail but our mind says ‘piece(s) of humans in the name of religion’ again invoked by the so called guardians of the democracy our politicians.

    Kindly tell me how you find this anmd do check it for grammar, I am awry about the last para, does it sound correct?

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    Default Re: Creative writing...please correct grammar

    Quote Originally Posted by new2grammar View Post
    Democracy is

    Buy the people by the people
    Far the people for the people
    Off the people of the people

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    new2grammar, please rework all of the following examples. None makes sense to me. Think, again, about what you are trying to say!

    Our politicians are experts in earning

    Name, fame but without shame

    Indeed our citizens don’t believe in casting vote but to vote castes

    Our heart says ‘peace of society’ should prevail but our mind says ‘piece(s) of humans in the name of religion’ again invoked by the so called guardians of the democracy our politicians.

    Kindly tell me how you find this an*m*d do check it for grammar,. I am (awry) worried about the last paragraph; does it sound correct?
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    Default Re: Creative writing...please correct grammar

    Amigos4.: This is a satirical takeoff, and the first 'quotes' were intended as is, I'm sure.

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    Quote Originally Posted by David L. View Post
    Amigos4.: This is a satirical takeoff, and the first 'quotes' were intended as is, I'm sure.
    You are correct Mr David, after all i try to bring out the best possible humor out of it. Please let me know if any changes you think I shall make

    Thanks in advance!

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    Quote Originally Posted by David L. View Post
    Amigos4.: This is a satirical takeoff, and the first 'quotes' were intended as is, I'm sure.
    Thanks, David! I guess this Yankee Doodle Dandy just doesn't see the satire! Perhaps my old age is catching up with me!!!

    Cheers,
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    Quote Originally Posted by amigos4 View Post
    Thanks, David! I guess this Yankee Doodle Dandy just doesn't see the satire! Perhaps my old age is catching up with me!!!

    Cheers,
    Amigo
    Try to run faster and don't let old age catch you

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    Quote Originally Posted by new2grammar View Post
    Try to run faster and don't let old age catch you
    I'll try, new2grammar! I'll surely try!

    Cheers,
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