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    Default Re: The operation - Part one Short story

    Quote Originally Posted by RonBee View Post
    Thanks.
    H-hold on. I said one, not two.

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    Default Re: The operation - Part one Short story

    Correction
    The last sentence was, of course, supposed to be:
    He could never understand that I had felt much better during the war surrounded with people than sitting lonely in my flat surrounded with machines who look like humans but never say a single word.
    Perhaps better:
    He could never understand that I had felt much better during the war surrounded with people than sitting lonely in my flat surrounded with machines who look like humans but never speak to me.
    What do you think?


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