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    Kindly check my para on financial

    Saving Rs. 1500 per month will give you Rs. 20 lacs within 20 years.

    Start early to gain more. Just a little amount saving per month today will get you a coffer of over flowing cash tomorrow. Secure your future, assure your family happiness. You can start systematic investment plan with as much little amount as you can afford. Just call up our agent today he will help you to select your plan. It’s a matter of your future and your family’s happiness, so call our toll free no. XXXX now!


    Kindly ignore the currency part and check for the grammar and style of writing.

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    Re: Kindly check my para on financial

    Quote Originally Posted by new2grammar View Post
    Saving Rs. 1500 per month will give you Rs. 20 lacs within 20 years.

    Start early to gain more. Just a small amount of savings per month today will get you a coffer of overflowing cash tomorrow. Secure your future and assure your family's happiness. You can start a systematic investment plan with any amount you can afford. Just call up our agent today and he will help you (to) select your plan.
    Itís a matter of your future and your familyís happiness, so call our toll-free number XXXX now!


    Kindly ignore the currency part and check for the grammar and style of writing.
    1...Note that "overflowing" is one word and "toll-free" is hyphenated.

    2...Instead of "any amount", you can choose 'as little as' or 'as much as'.
    You could also say 'with (any amount)(as little as)(as much as) you wish'.

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