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    Love letter from teeth to toothpaste

    Dearest Colgate Toothbrush,

    I always wait for that time of the Day when you come and hold me close, throw yourself upon me. When you caress all over my body, it brighten me up. Indeed you are only who can reach deep inside and make me happy. It makes me feel so nice that someone cares for me so much.
    Missing you so much honey!
    Never leave me I am yours forever

    Lots of love
    Ms Teeth

    For better understanding I am explaning each sentence in details:

    I always wait for that time of the Day when you come and hold me close, throw yourself upon me.(the morning or night at the time we brush our teeth )
    When you caress all over my body, it brighten me up. (brushing the teeth from all sides)
    Indeed you are only who can reach deep inside and make me happy. (reaching till the root of the teeth)

    Kinldy check my letter for grammar errors if any. And if you can add up anything to make it more interesting, Its my creative writing assignment.

    Thanks in advance!

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    Re: Love letter from teeth to toothpaste

    Quote Originally Posted by new2grammar View Post
    Dearest Colgate Toothbrush,

    I always wait for that time of the Day when you come and hold me close, throw yourself upon me. When you caress all over my body, it brighten me up. Indeed you are only who can reach deep inside and make me happy. It makes me feel so nice that someone cares for me so much.
    Missing you so much honey!
    Never leave me I am yours forever

    Lots of love
    Ms Teeth

    For better understanding I am explaning each sentence in details:

    I always wait for that time of the Day when you come and hold me close, throw yourself upon me.(the morning or night at the time we brush our teeth )
    When you caress all over my body, it brighten me up. (brushing the teeth from all sides)
    Indeed you are only who can reach deep inside and make me happy. (reaching till the root of the teeth)

    Kinldy check my letter for grammar errors if any. And if you can add up anything to make it more interesting, Its my creative writing assignment.

    Thanks in advance!
    Missing you so much ! Not using toothbrush for long?
    Good piece. Keep it up.
    Regards,
    rj1948.

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    Re: Love letter from teeth to toothpaste

    Quote Originally Posted by rj1948 View Post
    Missing you so much ! Not using toothbrush for long?
    Good piece. Keep it up.
    Regards,
    rj1948.
    Do you think keeping that sentence in the end implies not used toothbrush for long. Any other phrase or sentence to reply??

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    Re: Love letter from teeth to toothpaste

    Dearest Colgate Toothbrush,

    I always wait for that time of day when you come and hold me close, throw yourself upon me. When you caress me all over my body, it brightens me up. Indeed, you are the only one who can reach deep inside and make me happy. It makes me feel so good that someone cares for me so much.

    Missing you so much, honey!

    Never leave me. I am yours forever.

    Lots of love
    Ms Teeth

    Perhaps a stronger start:
    I long for that time of day...
    I can hardly wait for that time of day...


    Some changes to make it smoother. Nice piece, otherwise.

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    Re: Love letter from teeth to toothpaste

    Quote Originally Posted by Anglika View Post
    Dearest Colgate Toothbrush,

    I always wait for that time of day when you come and hold me close, throw yourself upon me. When you caress me all over my body, it brightens me up. Indeed, you are the only one who can reach deep inside and make me happy. It makes me feel so good that someone cares for me so much.

    Missing you so much, honey!

    Never leave me. I am yours forever.

    Lots of love
    Ms Teeth

    Perhaps a stronger start:
    I long for that time of day...
    I can hardly wait for that time of day...

    Some changes to make it smoother. Nice piece, otherwise.
    Thanks a lot Anglika, any thing else we can add up to this to make it more exciting or to romanticize it

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    Re: Love letter from teeth to toothpaste

    Unless you are required to write a particular number of words, I would leave it as it is!

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