Hi! Would you please proofread this story at your convenience? It is just a translation exercise basically. Thanks in advance!
Tom was a detective plays fan. He always had a great interest in discerning who the murderer was by each word, each fishy plot.
One day, he went to cinema for a play named Murder in the Park. The scene started as soon as a waiter ushered him to his seat.
The waiter asked, " Are you satisfied with your position, Sir?"
Tom nodded, " Yep, thank you!"
Th wait continued, "Can I take your hat to the cloakroom?"
" No, thanks!" Tom responded. And then he said to himself, " The guy might go at once."
But the waiter kept asking, " Would you like a playbill?"
Tom said impatiently, " Nope!'
The waiter furthered, " Or a telescope?"
Tom fumed and turned it down again. The waiter kept dogging whether Tom would like chocolate cookie or a bottle of champagne. The plot turned to the climax.
Tom flared up, " I want nothing. Get lost!"
The waiter finally figured out he couldn't get a tip from Tom so he decided to teach Tom a lesson. He pointed out towards the stage and whispered spitefully near Tom's ear, "The murderer is just the gardener!"
Last edited by thedaffodils; 30-May-2008 at 06:45.
Thank you very much for taking time to proofread it. You are a big help.