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    plz some one can check my composition and grammar
    plz can any one help me :
    Finding a marriage partner can be difficult. write a well-organized paragraph discussing the aforementioned topic.
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    Never enough to get marriage
    When u became young man so you will thinking about the future. The future doesn't pass and the past won't overtake the present. All that remains is an obsolete illusion. So Here I am, the future is mine and mine as well, and we’ll stand at the top of a prosperous society.
    Our future always has delusion like marriage because it's so difficult to find it for many reasons. As psychology of women, and high cost of living and time etc …
    For me as poet. I am always romantic to think about her. I am in love with women form Spain And she give me promise to keep love forever and ever.
    Any way I am not find problem to get marriage. Because I am control my mine as will. But some young boys will thanking about marriage and in our days it's so hard to find women that y dreamed about her.
    U needs her to understand u and always the young Arab so romantic. When he fall in love become dancer with a foolish fate. Like many virgins wait for him to come.
    We are as eastern fight with the hindrance like high cost of living. The young boy working all the day just to get money but in the end. He does nothing because he spends a lot of money and as I say high cost of living.
    Never have enough we had military service because we are all pessimistic to fight our enemies. Any way so you should by force waste two years form your age to the high sky and when u finish you will cry to the heaven's high but believe me These leaden tears will never dry?
    God Can't you see what you've done to all of us? Torturing me has no use here anymore.

    And now if we speak about the important part which is the Time. Needed all the time and million of volume books.
    We will never know all possibilities to predict what is to come and so we have illusions to think freely on it.
    Our time like game the game is over, time has taught life. It's hard to control in your time and time will devour us.
    When time feels like a burden we struggle with our certain death. So did u have time to race with time? To get marriage or something more.
    And we wait for the day to discover there’s no way. I can't wait at this rate It’s too little and too late to live this lie. To get marriage
    Finally Wisdom, knowledge, science Develops, always, better, faster
    Defeats us Destroys us so u will not get marriage. This is the final end.



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    Default Re: check my composition and grammar

    oh my God! no one here ...plz any one can answer me ..

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    Default Re: check my composition and grammar

    For a start, the topic is:
    Finding a marriage partner can be difficult.
    Secondly, you say this:
    write a well-organized paragraph discussing the aforementioned topic.

    Your piece is more than one paragraph, and does not in fact discuss the topic. I think you need to rethink it. Also, please do not use abbreviations in your texts.

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    Default Re: check my composition and grammar

    One of your goals should be to make sense. The composition should make sense to the reader. You should be able to answer the question (about any sentence) "What does that mean?"

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    Never enough to get marriage
    Exactly what does that mean?


    Quote Originally Posted by Epica View Post
    When u became young man so you will thinking about the future.
    When you become a young man you start thinking about the future.
    Quote Originally Posted by Epica View Post
    The future doesn't pass and the past won't overtake the present.

    What exactly does that mean?


    What is the subject?


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    Ya thankx for Anglika and RonBee .

    This paragraph so bad. I will try for write another one. Will be good than from this.

    Thanks all

    I am so happy in this forum

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    Default Re: check my composition and grammar

    Did you have trouble understanding my questions?





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    Quote Originally Posted by RonBee View Post
    One of your goals should be to make sense. The composition should make sense to the reader. You should be able to answer the question (about any sentence) "What does that mean?"

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    Exactly what does that mean?


    When you become a young man you start thinking about the future.
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    What exactly does that mean?

    What is the subject?


    the main idea is "Finding a marriage partner can be difficult". so discuss this issue . so for that I am write that topic on the first post to me .

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    Quote Originally Posted by RonBee View Post
    Did you have trouble understanding my questions?





    yes so clear ....

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