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    Banner descriptions

    Is the following banner descriptions grammatically correct and acceptable?

    "XXX Annual Dinner cum Celebration of the Completion of XXX Education Tour and Graduation of the Language Classes"

    Thank for advice.

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    Re: Banner descriptions

    "XXX Annual Dinner cum Celebration of the Completion of XXX Education Tour and Graduation of the Language Classes"

    I think the message on a banner should be short and eye-catching to give the impact.

    I suggest the message above be shortened:

    XXX Annual Dinner-Cum-Celebration of the
    Education Tour & Language Class Graduation

    'cum' should be hyphenated with the other words.

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    Re: Banner descriptions

    Quote Originally Posted by tedtmc View Post
    "XXX Annual Dinner cum Celebration of the Completion of XXX Education Tour and Graduation of the Language Classes"

    I think the message on a banner should be short and eye-catching to give the impact.

    I suggest the message above be shortened:

    XXX Annual Dinner-Cum-Celebration of the
    Education Tour & Language Class Graduation

    'cum' should be hyphenated with the other words.
    Thank you tedtmc.
    One more last question. If I want to say something like "...-Cum-Celebration of the successful completion of the Shanghai Education Tour (an extramural activities organised by school) & Language Class Graduation", how can I make it shorter without sacrificing the original meaning? Thanks again.

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    Re: Banner descriptions

    duplicate post
    Last edited by tedtmc; 06-Jun-2008 at 17:30.

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    Re: Banner descriptions

    Hi Deepurple
    Actually, it is more of an exercise in graphics rather than language.
    Here is another suggestion:

    XXX ANNUAL DINNER-CUM-CELEBRATION OF THE
    SUCCESSFUL CONCLUSION OF THE SHANGHAI EDUCATION TOUR &
    LANGUAGE CLASS GRADUATION


    Hmm...was wondering if 'conclusion' sounds better than 'completion'.
    What do you think, teachers?
    Also, should it be 'educational tour' or 'education tour'??

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    Re: Banner descriptions

    Quote Originally Posted by tedtmc View Post
    Hi Deepurple
    Actually, it is more of an exercise in graphics rather than language.
    Here is another suggestion:

    XXX ANNUAL DINNER-CUM-CELEBRATION OF THE
    SUCCESSFUL CONCLUSION OF THE SHANGHAI EDUCATION TOUR &
    LANGUAGE CLASS GRADUATION


    Hmm...was wondering if 'conclusion' sounds better than 'completion'.
    What do you think, teachers?
    Also, should it be 'educational tour' or 'education tour'??
    Dear tedtmc,
    Regarding the use of "educaitonal" and "education", we have discussed this before. Please go to here for answers.
    It should be "educational" in this case. Thanks again.
    Last edited by Deepurple; 07-Jun-2008 at 03:32.

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    Re: Banner descriptions

    Thanks, Deepurple. (Incidentally, is this your favourite pop group?)

    Hmm...was wondering if 'conclusion' sounds better than 'completion'.
    What do you think, teachers?
    Can I have some advice on this, please?

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    Re: Banner descriptions

    Quote Originally Posted by tedtmc View Post
    Thanks, Deepurple. (Incidentally, is this your favourite pop group?)



    Can I have some advice on this, please?
    Yes. If I have any English problems at work, I will post them to here for solutions right away. And the teachers here are efficient, they will give me a reply sooner than expected. This is a most excellent site I have ever seen. Tedtmc, do you have any other pop groups you would recommend to me?

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