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    Default please correct this paragraph

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    I was standing in the courtyard. My brother with his full force pulled me backwards.As I was not ready to give up I used my full force to push myself to the front..Unfortunately I couldn’t balance, my legs got/were slipped and fell down smashing my face against the ground.My face was bleeding.They rushed me to the hospital and I got eight stitches in my forehead.My parents beat my brother for his deed.I felt sorry for him and felt that it was his offday.

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    Quote Originally Posted by muktha View Post
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    I was standing in the courtyard. My brother pulled me backwards with his full force. As I was not ready to give up, I used my full force to push myself to the front. Unfortunately, I could not maintain a balance. I slipped and fell down smashing my face against the ground. My face was bleeding. I was rushed to the hospital and got eight stitches in my forehead. My parents beat my brother for what he did to me. I felt sorry for him and felt that it was his off day.

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    Quote Originally Posted by muktha View Post
    hiiiii

    I was standing in the courtyard. My brother with his full force pulled me backwards.As I was not ready to give up I used my full force to push myself to the front..Unfortunately I couldn’t balance, my legs got/were slipped and fell down smashing my face against the ground.My face was bleeding.They rushed me to the hospital and I got eight stitches in my forehead.My parents beat my brother for his deed.I felt sorry for him and felt that it was his offday.

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    I'm not currently a qualified teacher.

    I was standing, impatiently, in the courtyard. My brother, with all his power, pulled me back, but I was not ready to give up. I used everything I had to force myself to the front, though unfortunately, I couldn't balance. My legs slipped and I fell down - smashing my face against the hard ground. My face was bleeding and I was rushed to the hospital where I received eight stiches in my forehead. My parents beat my brother for his misdeed, yet I felt sorry for him. It was not one of his best days.

    Maybe I have changed it too much?

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    Thanks

    Is it correct to say

    He was standing in front of me.
    He was standing back of me

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    Quote Originally Posted by muktha View Post
    Thanks

    Is it correct to say

    He was standing in front of me.
    He was standing back of me

    He was standing in front of me.
    He was standing back of me.

    He was standing behind me.

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    Quote Originally Posted by muktha View Post
    Thanks

    Is it correct to say

    He was standing in front of me.
    He was standing back of me
    Hello!
    Was he standing behind you /in front of you?
    He was behind you./standing behind you.

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    Quote Originally Posted by colloquium View Post
    I'm not currently a qualified teacher.

    I was standing, impatiently, in the courtyard. My brother, with all his power, pulled me back, but I was not ready to give up. I used everything I had to force myself to the front, though unfortunately, I couldn't balance. My legs slipped and I fell down - smashing my face against the hard ground. My face was bleeding and I was rushed to the hospital where I received eight stiches in my forehead. My parents beat my brother for his misdeed, yet I felt sorry for him. It was not one of his best days.

    Maybe I have changed it too much?
    It was one of his bad days/.It was not his day.
    Thanks.

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    Default Re: please correct this paragraph

    thanks rj

    Both sentences are same right?
    If he was behind,and there were two persons standing between us how to say it?

    Even though he was standing behind me,there were two persons in between. is it right?

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    Quote Originally Posted by muktha View Post
    thanks rj

    Both sentences are same right?
    If he was behind,and there were two persons standing between us how to say it?

    Even though he was standing behind me,there were two persons in between. is it right?

    thanks
    He was behind me and there weretwo persons between us.
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    Default Re: please correct this paragraph

    It was not one of his best days.

    It was one of his bad days.
    It was not his day. (It was an unpleasant/unlucky day for him)

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