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    Dear Sir or Madam

    Request for offer for perfume "Juliette"

    With reference to the advertisement in this month issue of Health & Bodycare in which you advertise for the perfume Juliette, we would like you to let us have the following information.

    - In which quantity and packaging is the perfum available?
    - How much is the unit price and are you prepared to grant quantity discounts?
    - Do you dispose of photos or brochures of presentation packaging?
    - Have you made experiences about the reaction of the customers so far? If so, have they been more positive or negative?

    Moreover, we would like to know whether you financially support sales promotion campaigns.

    Please supply us with detailed documentaion.

    We look forward to you reply with interest.

    Yours faithfully

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    Dear Sir or Madam

    Request for offer for perfume "Juliette"

    With reference to the advertisement in this month’s issue of Health & Body care, in which you have advertised for the perfume Juliette, we would like you to let us have the following information.

    - In what (which) quantity and type of packaging is the perfume available?
    - How much is the unit price and whether you are prepared to allow (grant) quantity discounts?
    - Do you distribute (dispose of) photos or brochures showing the product with the(of presentation) packaging?
    - Have you made any survey or exercise (experiences about) to ascertain the reaction of the customers so far? If so, have they been more positive or negative?

    Moreover, we would like to know whether you financially support sales promotion campaigns.

    Please supply us with detailed documentation.

    We look forward to your reply with interest.

    Yours faithfully

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    Default Re: Please help me with this letter!

    At first thank you for your correction. I have another question.
    To dispose of why is it wrong? what can I use if I want to say for example: our personnel has (dispose of) a great knowledge? this sentence sounds bad. Could you give me a better suggestion to express it more formal?

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    Default Re: Please help me with this letter!

    Its very good nothing is wrong with it but add more information for them

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    Default Re: Please help me with this letter!

    Do you mean the corrected one or the first one is without mistakes?

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    Default Re: Please help me with this letter!

    Quote Originally Posted by sab19 View Post
    To dispose of why is it wrong? what can I use if I want to say for example: our personnel has (dispose of) a great knowledge? this sentence sounds bad. Could you give me a better suggestion to express it more formal?
    Hey there,

    You can make this phrase sound more elegant if you recast it. Try one of these:

    Our personnel has a great amount of knowledge at its disposal
    Our personnel possesses a great amount of knowledge
    Our personnel is knowledgeable

    Hope this helps,

    GL

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    Quote Originally Posted by sab19 View Post
    At first thank you for your correction. I have another question.
    To dispose of why is it wrong? what can I use if I want to say for example: our personnel has (dispose of) a great knowledge? this sentence sounds bad. Could you give me a better suggestion to express it more formal?
    dispose of: is a phrasal verb having the following meanings
    a. to throw away, put in a trash container: After your picnic, please dispose of the trash.
    b. to deal with some matter and bring to a conclusion: The committee quickly disposed of the first matter on the agenda.
    So dispose of knowledge does not go quite well with the meaning. Distribute is better word for imparting information/wealth/knowledge.

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    Default Re: Please help me with this letter!

    Ok thanks a lot. Now I know the difference. I've always used dipose of because in French it has the same meaning like in German
    But now I'm smarter

    Can I ask you another question (I know you've got other things to do but it's just a little question ) I've posted it already but didn't get an answer.

    What can I use to express favourable (for the price)

    - low priced?
    -advantageous?
    or is reasonably priced the best solution in business letters

    Thanks in advance

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    Hi sab19! In projecting a price of a product do not use 'low priced' It will have a negative response.
    Reasonably priced is ok.
    Please try the following.
    The best value for quality and service.
    The best value money can buy.
    The best price to suit your pocket.
    Excellent quality at attractive price

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