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    Help with Bylaws wording?

    I hope you'll help...our club is revising its bylaws, and this paragraph just doesn't make sense. The problem is mostly in the last part of the paragraph, which I've italicized.
    Can you kindly suggest a better phrase? I'd greatly appreciate your help. Thank you!

    "The Board of Directors shall have summary power by vote of a majority of its members, to suspend or expel and terminate the membership of any member for conduct which in its opinion disturbs the order, dignity, business or harmony, or impairs the good name, popularity, good will or prosperity of the organization, or which is likely to endanger conduct in violation of these By-Laws or the rules and regulations of the Club which may be taken at any meeting of such board. "

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    Re: Help with Bylaws wording?

    I can't suggest a better phrase. I can't figure out what is meant by the passage in question. Perhaps it would be best to delete it, as it doesn't seem necessary. In any case, one can't "endanger conduct". The passage in question will clearly have to be either deleted or rewritten.

    Perhaps "engender conduct" or "encourage conduct" is what was intended.

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    I'm sure it's 'engender', but would 'provoke' or 'cause' be better?

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    Quote Originally Posted by tdol
    I'm sure it's 'engender', but would 'provoke' or 'cause' be better?
    One could perhaps inspire conduct, but I don't think provoke or cause work well there. You could also provoke a reaction or provoke a person. You can also cause many things, but it doesn't seem to work there. Perhaps I will do a www.google.com search.

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