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    Business letter - problem with shipment (2)

    Thank your for your photos. However, there were not any protections on these containers floor? We had required you to put the plastic film on the container floor for each container before shipment, but you did not follow it? Please note that, this is protecting to your company to avoid any compliant and claim from our customer if the goods had problem. Please take immediately action, do not afraid trouble to put the protection on the floor **(for all containers before shipping), even thought their floor is clean. Please contact us again if you have any problem.

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    Exclamation Re: Please correct my grammar

    Thank your for your photos. However, there were not any protection on these containers’ floor? We had advised (required) you to put a (the) plastic film on the container floor for each container before shipment but you did not follow the same (it)? Please note that, this is a protection (ng) (to) for your company to avoid any complaint and claim from our customer in case (if) the goods had problem. Please take immediate action and do not invite (afraid) trouble (to) by not putting (put) the protection on the floor **(for all containers before shipping), even though their floor is clean. Please contact us again if you have any problem.

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    Delete words in the bracket.

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    Re: Please correct my grammar

    In the photos sent, we noticed that protective sheeting was not placed under the containers before shipment. This procedure was put into place to protect your company from any complaints or claims from the customer. From this date forward, the procedure must be followed for each container, even if the floor is clean. Please contact us if you have any questions.

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    Re: Please correct my grammar

    Soup, you are a genius! You are a wonder! You are a miracle worker!


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    Re: Please correct my grammar

    Quote Originally Posted by RonBee View Post
    Soup, you are a genius! You are a wonder! You are a miracle worker!

    Ron, step away from the bar.

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    Re: Business letter - problem with shipment (2)

    I would never have figured that one out.

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    Re: Please correct my grammar

    Hi Manas,

    Can I use "getting trouble" instead of "invite trouble" below ?

    Please take immediate action and do not invite trouble by not putting the protection on the floor, even though their floor is clean.

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    Last edited by Zoe2008; 15-Jun-2008 at 13:51.

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    Re: Please correct my grammar

    Quote Originally Posted by Zoe2008 View Post
    Hi Manas,

    Can I use "fear of trouble" instead of "invite trouble" below ?

    Please take immediate action and do not invite trouble by not putting the protection on the floor, even though their floor is clean.
    No. Say:
    Please take immediate action and do not invite trouble by not putting the protection on the floor.
    Once you have figured out how to say what you want to say then say it. Don't keep looking for new ways to say the same thing. In a business letter you want to get to the point. (It's not creative writing.)

    Do you think you are making progress?


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    Re: Please correct my grammar

    Hi RonBee,

    No, I do not agreed with you. I just feel 'invite trouble' is so strange, and try to find out the correct word but not make progress. I only want to learn more !

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    Quote Originally Posted by Zoe2008 View Post
    Hi Manas,

    Can I use "getting trouble" instead of "invite trouble" below ?

    Please take immediate action and do not invite trouble by not putting the protection on the floor, even though their floor is clean.

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    As far as I could figure out, You can use get into trouble instead of invite trouble. I have another suggestion to use the verb avoid and do away with many other words, as:
    Please take immediate action and do not avoid to put the protection on the floor, even though their floor is clean.

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