I am new here. I have recently written an article about the earthquke happened in my country. Actually it is a homework required by my teacher. To be frank, I wrote it very carefully;while it turned to be a poor job. I am too shy to ask my teacher to show me the mistakes. Could you be give me a hand? The following is the origine version:
However, love accomplishes all things. That’s what our Chinese prove in the rescue efforts. After the whole thing was reported, a flourish of sympathy and donation raised immediately——donating money, blood and kinds of commodities. All classes of the society ranging from the President Hu Jintao and Premier Wen Jiabao to the students and the pupils stand out and do their best to assisting the earthquake victims ——as volunteers, as donators, and affectingly as anonyms.
Nothing more powerful affects the whole Chinese these days but the unexpected earthquake in Sichuan. At 2:28 p.m. May 12th, 2008, a major earthquake measuring 7.8 on the Richter scale jolted Wenchuan County. Till now, the death toll has risen to 62,664; 358,816 injured and still another 23,775 people are missing. Houses, industries, markets, schools and etc. a large number of buildings were concussed to the ground, resulting instantaneously hundreds of thousands of people homeless. Besides, the homes of giant pandas there (the Wolong Nature Reserve) were also destroyed, and the bears were left in dire need of their favorite food, bamboo. Because of the earthquake, two pandas injured and six pandas missing -- four of them returned and workers are still looking for the other two. In that, it was another destructive disaster following the Tangshan earthquake, or precisely, it’s more severe this time.
With that, I cannot help thinking over what exactly we, these undergraduates, can do. Of course not was the paradise around the dormitories and the whole school without concerning its chaos and ill influence to others, and most of all, it doesn’t contribute anything at all for those people in the disasters. As for us, those disaster areas are too far to be volunteers on the spot, for we still have much to do on our studying. Nevertheless, we, even sitting on the classroom, can make something——
When we sitting in the classroom with all the classmates together, talking about the dreadful earthquake, we may realize that how lucky we are, for we are still alive, and we are still together no matter how misfortune we might feel a second ago. At the same time, we may also get an unquenchable sorry inwardly, for the victims are just our fellow men. Praying for them.
When we are before the screens, looking at those sight-shocking pictures one by one, at those heart-quaking reports piece by piece, and at those tear-flooding scenes act by act, we may tense up or cool it ever and agah, for we are wholly concerned the latest situation of the rescue efforts. Praying for them.
When we walk in the college or in the street, passing through the contribution box, we may stay for a while, and donate some in our power. If possible, we’d better donate money rather than kinds of articles for the convenience. And no need to comparing of course. Love without amount, and love without bound.
When we are reflecting on this disaster, on its causes, on its process and its results, we may be clearer of what we can exactly do. Study ever more hard, and contribute more for the society. Though the earthquake is inevitable, it is also undeniable that some controllable factors do results in such tremendous loss—— no information of forecast, and those disillusionary poor project. If we, the young generation, work harder and are of one mind toward the society construction, the society would be more harmonious and in better order. At least, once such mischance happened again, the results could be reduced to the less. Nothing is impossible for a willing heart.
Just as the saying goes, “Blood is thicker than water.” People in Sichuan are our relatives as well as those living around us. In this disaster, almost every one is eager to do something sensible and helpful. It is more blessed to give than to receive, just as we have known. Then a second thing: cherish the lives. Nothing is more important. As long as there is life, there is hope; and without, nothing.