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    Question Love is greatest (II),Please correct my wrongs

    6> That year ,China Football Team's possibility of emergence had been quenched,and we in the building of machine engineering department and the front building of architecture engineering department brothers were in revolt against insanely!!! The beer bottles were rejected and casted through to the ground.The grandfather was uttered a malediction downstairs. Faraway hired flunkies of "a security section" were abusing astringently to intimidate,but who would glimpse at them!!! I rejected the aerated-water bottles,the legumes-milk bottles to outside.After that ,I tried my best to beat the iron barrel .The dormitory classmates reviled soon:" damn,don't do that,soon sleep!!!!" I continued to beat that thing.Many quilts from many dormitory classmates rejected down which's flaming fiercely,but I have no redundant .If mine's destroyed and I must buy one new which's too obviously many troubles.



    Totally I had such a intuitive feeling:the men in architecture engineering department were much fiercer,to speak frankly,and deserve commendation ...[The broken glasses pieces,like heaped up snow,had been very deep,hehe~~~]


    Thank you for correcting my wrongs in my compsition~~~
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    Default Re: Love is greatest (II),Please correct my wrongs

    Welcome to the forums.

    Here is a start on correcting:

    Quote Originally Posted by dodonaomik View Post
    6> That year, China Football Team's possibility of emergence had been quenched, and we in the building of machine engineering department machine building and engineering department and the front building of architecture engineering department brothers our brothers in the architecture engineering department were in revolt against insanity! The beer bottles were rejected and casted through emptied and thrown to the ground.The grandfather was uttered a malediction downstairs.The grandfather downstairs muttered maledictions.

    I am afraid you have a lot of work to do on the rest.

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    Default Re: Love is greatest (II),Please correct my wrongs

    Quote Originally Posted by Anglika View Post
    I am afraid you have a lot of work to do on the rest.
    Can you continue to help me when you're free? I am ready to use English( I love her—the Enlish language) to recall scrappy remembrances of university
    Anglika,thanks a lot!
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