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    Default 7>Please correct my mistakes, shie shie [memorize my life in university]

    On the flat of the building of architecture engineering department.Can I remember that night ,there were rounds of slight cool breeze/bizarre,and lied down on the floor ,and looked up at the stars,and sang the song " Peng Hu Gulf".Isn't this naive and unconventional for engineering departments students?

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    Default Re: 7>Please correct my mistakes, shie shie [ memorize my life in university]

    Quote Originally Posted by dodonaomik View Post
    On the flat of the building of architecture engineering department.
    That is not a sentence. What are you trying to say?

    Quote Originally Posted by dodonaomik View Post
    Can I remember that night ,there were rounds of slight cool breeze/bizarre,and lied down on the floor ,and looked up at the stars,and sang the song " Peng Hu Gulf".
    "Can I remember that night?" is an odd question to ask the reader. You can say "gusts" or "wind gusts" or "gusts of wind" or "the night was gusty", but you can't say "rounds of slight cool breezes". Who or what lay down on the floor?

    Quote Originally Posted by dodonaomik View Post
    Isn't this naive and unconventional for engineering department students?
    That's a sentence.

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    Question Re: 7>Please correct my mistakes, shie shie [memorize my life in university]

    On the flat of the building of architecture engineering department,Can you( refer to the sky or the ground or the god) remember that night was gusty ,and I lied down on the floor and looked up at the stars singing the song " Peng Hu Gulf".Isn't this naive and unconventional for engineering department students?


    Are there any wrongs?
    Who can hep me point out those wrongs?Thank you!

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    Default Re: 7>Please correct my mistakes, shie shie [memorize my life in university]

    The question should be:
    Are there any mistakes?
    The answer is:
    Yes, there are plenty.
    There needs to be a verb for there to be a sentence. The first "sentence" doesn't have a verb. You need to space after sentences (after periods). And do try to make sense. Perhaps:
    I was on the roof of the buioding of the architectural engineering department. The night was gusty. I lay down on the floor and looked up at the stars singing the song " Peng Hu Gulf". Don't you think that's unconventional for engineering department students?


    What do you think?


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    Default Re: 7>Please correct my mistakes, shie shie [memorize my life in university]

    Quote Originally Posted by RonBee View Post
    I was on the roof of the buioding of the architectural engineering department. The night was gusty. I lay down on the floor and looked up at the stars singing the song " Peng Hu Gulf". Don't you think that's unconventional for engineering department students?


    What do you think?

    Yeah,you are totally right and veri kind.I admire you in my heart really!

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    Default Re: 7>Please correct my mistakes, shie shie [memorize my life in university]

    Quote Originally Posted by RonBee View Post
    I was on the roof of the buioding of the architectural engineering department. The night was gusty. I lay down on the floor and looked up at the stars singing the song " Peng Hu Gulf". Don't you think that's unconventional for engineering department students?


    What do you think?

    Yeah,you are totally right and very kind.I admire you in my heart really!

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