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    Default Investing in Education

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    Brazilian government has also been investing in education, a well-known country's difficulty. REUNI is an investment plan that is aimed at increasing the Federal Universities capacity. The expectation is that this plan will raise the capacity by 30% until 2012. Other educational program, called PROUNI, subsidies educatinal fees in private universities, for students whose families have low income. Giving/Due to this investments the forecast is good for the country's educational progress, but it's not yet clear if the impact will be as positive as expected.

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    Could you correct this little piece of text please and maybe give me some advice to make my writting clearer?

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    Default Re: advice about writing

    Say:
    The Brazilian government has also been investing in education.
    (SInce I don't know what came before it, I am not sure about the "also" in that sentence.)

    I am not sure what "a well-known country's difficulty" means, but I suppose Brazil is indeed a well-known country.

    Say:
    REUNI is an investment plan that is aimed at increasing the capacity of the federal university system.

    The expectation is that this plan will raise the capacity by 30% by 2012.

    Another educational program, called PROUNI, subsidizes tuitions for private universities, for students whose families have low income.

    Due to these investments the forecast is good for the country's educational progress, but it's not yet clear if the impact will be as positive as expected.


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    Default Re: advice about writing

    Quote Originally Posted by RonBee View Post
    Say:
    The Brazilian government has also been investing in education.
    (SInce I don't know what came before it, I am not sure about the "also" in that sentence.)

    I am not sure what "a well-known country's difficulty" means, but I suppose Brazil is indeed a well-known country.

    Ok. I listed some other investiments before, that's why I used 'also".

    I didn't mean brazil is well-known, I mean that brazil has educational problems and it's well known at least by its inhabitants. I should elaborate it in a better way.

    I should've said:

    Brazilian government has also been investing in education, an issue that was neglected by the politicians for years. (I hope it works)

    Thank you so much RonBee.

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    Default Re: advice about writing

    Quote Originally Posted by anreak View Post


    Brazilian government has also been investing in education, an issue that was neglected by the politicians for years.
    That is better, but you can improve on it. For one thing, you need the definite article ("the"). Perhaps:
    The Brazilian government has recently been investing a great deal in education, an area that was neglected by the politicians for years.
    What do you think?


    Quote Originally Posted by anreak View Post
    Thank you so much RonBee.
    You're quite welcome.

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