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    Dear Teacher,

    Could you correct this text, please. Thank you.

    "A glance into the past

    In Hajdsmson the story of the education dates back to centuries, as from the 1300 years monks, then from the XVI. centuries reformed rectors taught in our village.

    The students number was only 30 boys in 1747. This number grew thanks to the starting girls education from 1773, the continuously growing population and the Jzsef Etvss draft of a new law of public school. This growing number was so great that the existing two classrooms capacity was not enough. Therefore the continuous classroom expansion began from 1878 and three new buildings were established: one in the Szatmri street in 1909, another Greek Catholic one in the rpd street, and a one-tiered school with 8 classrooms in 1938.

    The obligatory elementary school education started on 18th August 1945.
    The teaching began with 986 people in the school called Hajdusamsoni State Elementary School.

    From 1963 an opportunity opened for slightly injured, mentally retarded childrens training.

    Until 1980 we still struggled with the lack of classrooms, when the new central school was built with 8 classrooms, later it was enlarged with 4 classrooms.

    It was necessary to enlarge the classrooms again in 1997. We had not any special classrooms or workshops and not only on one occasion our children learned in a needy classroom.

    Long sruggling followed after this problem..."

    Thank you very much.

    rafael

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    The history of education dates back centuries

    the number of students

    The number of students grew so fast that....
    In Hajdsmson the story of the education dates back to centuries, as from the 1300 years monks, then from the XVI. centuries reformed rectors taught in our village.


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    Dear Teacher,

    Thank you for your reply.
    Is there any mistake in the quote you wrote back? Is it understandable in English or is there any more mistake in the rest of the text?
    Why is a question mark at the end of your letter.

    Thanks,
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    Quote Originally Posted by rafaelxx View Post
    In Hajdsmson the story of the education dates back to centuries, as from the 1300 years monks, then from the XVI. centuries reformed rectors taught in our village.
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    In Hajdsmson the story of education dates back centuries.
    I can't make sense of the rest of it. Do you mean to say that from the sixteenth century on reformed rectors taught in the village?


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    Quote Originally Posted by rafaelxx View Post
    The students number was only 30 boys in 1747. This number grew thanks to the starting girls education from 1773, the continuously growing population and the Jzsef Etvss draft of a new law of public school. This growing number was so great that the existing two classrooms capacity was not enough. Therefore the continuous classroom expansion began from 1878 and three new buildings were established: one in the Szatmri street in 1909, another Greek Catholic one in the rpd street, and a one-tiered school with 8 classrooms in 1938.
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    The total number was only thirty boys in 1747. The number of students grew due to the start of girls' education and the continously growing population of the town. The number of students outgrew the capacity of the existing two classrooms. A new school was built in 1878, another one in 1909, and another one in 1909.

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    Dear Teacher,

    Thanks for the reply.
    Yes, well.
    I mean that from 1300 (date of year) on monks taught (in our village) and from the sixteenth century on reformed rectors taught in our village. How can I say it in one sentece?

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    The total number was only thirty boys in 1747. The number of students grew due to the start of girls' education and the continously growing population of the town. The number of students outgrew the capacity of the existing two classrooms. A new school was built in 1878, another one in 1909, and another one in 1909.
    Dear Teacher,

    How can I add the names of the streets where the new school was built? And how can I add that one of the school on Arpad street is Greek Catholic one?
    Would this be correct:
    A new school was built in 1878 at Szatmri Street, another Greek Catholic one in 1909 at rpd Street, and another one in 1909 which has 8 classrooms on two level. (or is it better like: .......and another one-tiered school which has 8 classrooms.
    Does it make sense.
    Thanks,
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    Quote Originally Posted by rafaelxx View Post
    Dear Teacher,

    How can I add the names of the streets where the new school was built? And how can I add that one of the school on Arpad street is Greek Catholic one?
    Would this be correct:
    A new school was built in 1878 at Szatmri Street, another Greek Catholic one in 1909 at rpd Street, and another one in 1909 which has 8 classrooms on two level. (or is it better like: .......and another one-tiered school which has 8 classrooms.
    Does it make sense.
    Thanks,
    rafael
    Dear Teacher,
    Is there any more mistake in the rest of this text:
    "The obligatory elementary school education started on 18th August 1945.
    The teaching began with 986 people in the school called Hajdusamsoni State Elementary School.

    From 1963 an opportunity opened for slightly injured, mentally retarded children’s training.

    Until 1980 we still struggled with the lack of classrooms, when the new central school was built with 8 classrooms, later it was enlarged with 4 classrooms.

    It was necessary to enlarge the classrooms again in 1997. We had not any special classrooms or workshops and not only on one occasion our children learned in a needy classroom.

    Long sruggling followed after this problem..."

    Thank you very much.

    rafael

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    Quote Originally Posted by rafaelxx View Post
    Dear Teacher,

    How can I add the names of the streets where the new school was built? And how can I add that one of the school on Arpad street is Greek Catholic one?
    Would this be correct:
    A new school was built in 1878 at Szatmri Street, another Greek Catholic one in 1909 at rpd Street, and another one in 1909 which has 8 classrooms on two level. (or is it better like: .......and another one-tiered school which has 8 classrooms.
    Does it make sense.
    Thanks,
    rafael
    Try:
    A new school was built in 1878 on Szatmri Street, another one (Orthodox Catholic) in 1909 on rpd Street, and another one (a two-storey school) in 1909 on....

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    Quote Originally Posted by rafaelxx View Post
    Dear Teacher,
    Is there any more mistake in the rest of this text:
    "The obligatory elementary school education started on 18th August 1945.
    The teaching began with 986 people in the school called Hajdusamsoni State Elementary School.

    From 1963 an opportunity opened for slightly injured, mentally retarded childrens training.

    Until 1980 we still struggled with the lack of classrooms, when the new central school was built with 8 classrooms, later it was enlarged with 4 classrooms.

    It was necessary to enlarge the classrooms again in 1997. We had not any special classrooms or workshops and not only on one occasion our children learned in a needy classroom.

    Long sruggling followed after this problem..."
    Say:
    Compulsory elementary school education started in....
    Perhaps:
    Hajdusamsoni State Elementary School started with 986 pupils in....
    I know what "mentally retarded" means, but I am not sure what you mean by "slightly injured".

    Say:
    Until 1980 we struggled with the lack of classrooms....
    Make more sentences.

    Say:
    It was necessary to enlarge the classrooms again in 1997. We did not have any special classrooms....
    What is a needy classroom?

    Why a long struggle?


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