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    ken62310 is offline Newbie
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    Dear Parents/Guardians:

    The next two weeks will be very busy and exciting! We will be exploring new activities in St. John’s University.

    Due to the distance to travel, we need to leave earlier than usual in order to get to the program activities on time. Please have your child ready and at the community center by 7:45 a.m.

    Your cooperation will be greatly appreciated.

    Sincerely,

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    Dear Parents/Guardians:

    The following two weeks are expected to be overwhelmed by various activities. Exploring of new activities in St. John’s University will also take place.

    Due to the distance to destination point, it is of necessity to leave earlier than usual in order to get to the program activities on time. Please have your child ready and at the community center by 7:45 AM.
    Thank you for your understanding and cooperation.

    Sincerely,
    XXX.
    Haha, couldn't resist.

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    Default Re: can someone help me make this letter more formal??

    Quote Originally Posted by ken62310 View Post
    Dear Parents/Guardians,

    The next two weeks will be very busy and exciting! We will be exploring new activities in St. John’s University.

    Due to the distance we are going to have to travel, we need to leave earlier than usual in order to get to the program activities on time. Please have your child ready and at the community center by 7:45 a.m.

    Your cooperation will be greatly appreciated.

    Thank you.

    I don't see that it needs much changing. It seems fine to me.

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    we need to leave earlier than usual in order to get to the program activities on time. Please have your child ready and at the community center by 7:45 a.m.

    1. programmed activities?
    2. Please have(ensure) your child arrive at the community centre

    not a teacher

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    What Anglika said.

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    RB
    Is 'program activities' correct? 'Program' can be an adjective? Thanks.

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    The program activities are the activities on the program.



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