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    The New School

    Dear Teacher,

    Could you correct this text, please. Thank you.

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    On Friday 17th December 1999 the foundation stone of the new school was laid. The ceremony was opened by Gabor Hamza, then Miklosne Thomas the Department of Education’s manager, Laszlone Andor school manager and Sandor Kovacs reformed pastor delivered a speech.

    Within the ceremony process they put the flag of our village, a map, a local paper, the name list of the delegates, the pupils and the teachers, children’s drawings and their composition into a steel roll for the posterity.

    At last the building works started in two timings. On 29th August 2000 the new school-year of 2000/2001 started with a school-year opening ceremony. The pupils of Hajdusamson could already study in the new building and soon could use the new gym.

    In this time the new library was handed over in the attic of the new school. And with this an opportunity opened to develop a pedagogic department and

    The new school library was handed over in the attic of the new school. With this an opportunity opened not only to accommodate the children's book, but also shape up a pedagogic department. The standard of the information technology became suitable for the modern education thanks to the classroom of computer studies and the library.
    Much to the delight of all the new gym was handed over on 5th October 2002. Then the assembly hall was handed over so our programmes standard became higher. Now we can organize deservedly all of our school tradition and celebrations.
    This assembly hall is also used at several events like school events, nursery school events, gym programmes, convivial occasions, exhibitions. This assembly hall was made real saloon by András Galánfi, wood-carver and Péter Mátl sculptor artist who made a huge adorned wood-carving, which symbolize the seven tribe of the conquering Hungarians. This assembly hall cost nearly 10 million forints, could be accomplished with the supporting agreement of Gábor Hamza the mayor, and the local representatives. So the result of all this we can see these huge singly 10 meters wide and 12 meters high carving decorations made of lime tree on the frontage of our assembly hall."

    Thank you very much.

    rafael

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    re: The New School

    Quote Originally Posted by rafaelxx View Post
    On Friday 17th December 1999 the foundation stone of the new school was laid.

    Quote Originally Posted by rafaelxx View Post
    The ceremony was opened by Gabor Hamza,

    Gabor Hamza delivered the opening remarks.
    Quote Originally Posted by rafaelxx View Post
    then Miklosne Thomas the Department of Education’s manager, Laszlone Andor school manager and Sandor Kovacs reformed pastor delivered a speech.

    All three of them delivered one speech?

    Quote Originally Posted by rafaelxx View Post
    Within the ceremony process they put the flag of our village, a map, a local paper, the name list of the delegates, the pupils and the teachers, children’s drawings and their composition into a steel roll for the posterity.

    A time capsule?


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    Re: The New School

    Dear Teacher,

    Thanks for your reply.
    Well all four of them delivered a speech. How can I say that? Gabor Hamza opened the ceremony and started to deliver his speech then the other 3 person.
    Yeah, something like a time capsule.
    Did I use the right grammar? Is there any mistake in the rest of this text?
    "Within the ceremony process they put the flag of our village, a map, a local paper, the name list of the delegates, the pupils and the teachers, children’s drawings and their composition into a steel roll for the posterity."

    Thanks,
    rafael

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    Re: The New School

    Quote Originally Posted by rafaelxx View Post
    On Friday 17th December 1999 the foundation stone of the new school was laid. The ceremony was opened by Gabor Hamza, then Miklosne Thomas the Department of Education’s manager, Laszlone Andor school manager and Sandor Kovacs reformed pastor delivered a speech.

    On Friday 17th December 1999 the foundation stone of the new school was laid. Gabor Hamza delivered the opening remarks. Miklosne Thomas, the head of the Department of Education, Laszlone Andor, the school principal, and Sandor Kovacs, reformed pastor, delivered speeches of their own.
    See? (There is certainly some variation possible with that last sentence, but that's the general idea.)

    Quote Originally Posted by rafaelxx View Post
    Within the ceremony process they put the flag of our village, a map, a local paper, the name list of the delegates, the pupils and the teachers, children’s drawings and their composition into a steel roll for the posterity.

    They put the flag of our village, a map, a local paper, a list of the names of the delegates, the pupils and the teachers, and some of the children's drawings and compositions into a steel roll (time capsule) which was buried near the school.
    What do you think?


    What are timings?

    Your turn.


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    Re: The New School

    Dear teacher,
    Is this correct?
    "In Hajdúsámson the story of the education dates back centuries as monks (from 1300 years) and reformed rectors (from the XVI. centuries) taught in our village."
    Or how can I express the date from they taught in our village?

    Thanks,
    rafael

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    Re: The New School

    Quote Originally Posted by rafaelxx View Post
    Dear teacher,
    Is this correct?
    "In Hajdúsámson the story of the education dates back centuries as monks (from 1300 years) and reformed rectors (from the XVI. centuries) taught in our village."
    Or how can I express the date from they taught in our village?
    Make that at least two sentences. Perhaps:
    In Hajdúsámson the story of the education dates back centuries. From the year 1300 until XXXX monks taught in our village, and from XXXX until the present time reformed rectors have been teaching in our village.

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