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    Thesis statement(which one is better)

    I need write an essay of divorce is negative, here are my thesis statement, please help me to correct it or give me some opionions.

    1) Divorce is negative in the point of view, such as it on children, on women, and on society.

    2) Divorce is negative in the point of view, such as it negative effects on children, on women, and on society.

    3) Divorce in my point of view is a negative because it has a bad impact on children, on women, and on society.

    Thanks a lot!

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    Re: Thesis statement(which one is better)

    The third is the best, but I would say "in my view" rather than "in my point of view" unless your discussion is related to your personal experience of divorce. If it is, then the phrase should be "from my point of view".

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