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    Default can someone check this for comma splice and punctuation please!

    [FONT='Arial','sans-serif']Kool-Aid, Oh yeah![/FONT]
    [FONT='Arial','sans-serif']It has been said that Kool-Aid makes the world go round. Let it be advised, that without the proper directions the great American beverage is nothing more than an envelope of unsweetened powder. Then people have to mix it with the proper amount of sugar. That makes the Kool-Aid taste just right. There are four simple steps to create this candy tasting concoction: choose the flavor, get the equipment required, combine, and consume. [/FONT]
    [FONT='Arial','sans-serif'] Picking the proper packet of flavoring is the first step in making Kool-Aid. Check the grocer's shelf for a wide variety. The varieties range from Mountain Berry Punch to Tropical Blue Hawaiian. If it is a difficult decision to choose the flavor just go ahead and buy two. The packets usually run under 65 cents. [/FONT]
    [FONT='Arial','sans-serif'] After choosing the flavor that best suits most taste buds, the second step is making sure that the kitchen has some necessary equipment for making the Kool-Aid. Find a two-quart pitcher. Plastic is nice, but glass pitchers allow the liquid to shine through and add festive coloration to any refrigerator shelf. Next, find a long-handled wooden spoon, a one-cup measuring cup, a water faucet that spouts drinkable water, usable white sugar, and an ice cube tray full of ice. Then, mix all together. [/FONT]
    [FONT='Arial','sans-serif'] Third, grab the left edge of the Kool-Aid packet between the thumb and index finger. Use the other hand to tear open the top of packet. Next, dump the contents of the envelope into the pitcher. Notice how the powder floats before settling on the bottom of the pitcher. Then, take the measuring cup and scoop two cups of sugar into the pitcher as well. At this point, adding the water is a crucial step. Place the pitcher under the water faucet and slowly turn on the cold water. If the water is turned on too quickly, powder will fly all over when the initial gusts of water hit. After the pitcher is filled within two inches of the top, turn the water off and get prepared to stir. With the wooden spoon submersed three-quarters of the way in the liquid, vigorously stir in a clockwise motion until all of the powder is dissolved. Taste it, and if the Kool-Aid is not sweet enough, feel free to add more sugar. [/FONT]
    [FONT='Arial','sans-serif']Upon completion of making the Kool-Aid one should taste for sweetness. After this process the spoon and the measuring cup will need to be rinsed off with water. Take a glass from the cupboard. An eight-ounce glass is usually sufficient. But stronger thirsts might prefer a 32-ounce mug. Add ice and then fill the glass with Kool-Aid. Find a comfortable chair and drink away. Without the proper tools and directions, the great American beverage is nothing more than an envelope of unsweetened powder. After all, Kool-Aid makes the world go round. [/FONT]

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    Default Re: can someone check this for comma splice and punctuation please!

    I had one but the wheels fell off.
    Mark in Perth

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    Default Re: can someone check this for comma splice and punctuation please!

    Quote Originally Posted by mark in perth View Post
    I had one but the wheels fell off.
    Mark in Perth

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    Anglika is offline No Longer With Us
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    Default Re: can someone check this for comma splice and punctuation please!

    Welcome to the forums.

    Quote Originally Posted by jcs07 View Post
    Kool-Aid, Oh yeah!

    It has been said that Kool-Aid makes the world go round. Let it be advised, that without the proper directions the great American beverage is nothing more than an envelope of unsweetened powder. Then that people have to mix with the proper amount of sugar. That makes the Kool-Aid taste just right. There are four simple steps to create this candy sweet-tasting concoction: choose the flavor, get the equipment required, combine, and consume.

    Picking the proper packet of flavoring is the first step in making Kool-Aid. Check the grocer's shelf for a wide variety. The varieties range from Mountain Berry Punch to Tropical Blue Hawaiian. If it is a difficult decision to choose the flavor, just go ahead and buy two. The packets usually cost under 65 cents.

    After choosing the flavor that best suits most taste buds, the second step is making sure that the kitchen has the necessary equipment for making the Kool-Aid. Find a two-quart pitcher. Plastic is nice, but glass pitchers allow the liquid to shine through and add festive coloration to any refrigerator shelf. Next, find a long-handled wooden spoon, a one-cup measuring cup, a water faucet that spouts supplies drinkable water, usable white sugar, and an ice cube tray full of ice. Then mix all together.[That means mixing the spoon, cup, faucet, water, sugar and the ice - are you sure?]

    Third, grab take the left edge of the Kool-Aid packet between the thumb and index finger. Use the other hand to tear open the top of packet. Next, dump pour the contents of the envelope into the pitcher. Notice how the powder floats before settling on the bottom of the pitcher. Then take the measuring cup and scoop two cups of sugar into the pitcher as well. At this point, adding the water is a crucial step. Place the pitcher under the water faucet and slowly turn on the cold water. If the water is turned on too quickly, powder will fly all over when the initial gusts gush of water hits. After the pitcher is filled within two inches of the top, turn the water off and prepare to stir. With the wooden spoon submersed three-quarters of the way in the liquid, vigorously stir in a clockwise motion until all of the powder is dissolved. Taste it, and if the Kool-Aid is not sweet enough, feel free to add more sugar.

    Upon completion of making the Kool-Aid one should taste for sweetness.[repetition of last sentence in previous para] After this process the spoon and the measuring cup will need to be rinsed off with water. Take a glass from the cupboard. An eight-ounce glass is usually sufficient, but stronger thirsts might prefer a 32-ounce glass. Add ice and then fill the glass with Kool-Aid. Find a comfortable chair and drink away.

    Without the proper tools and directions, the great American beverage is nothing more than an envelope of unsweetened powder. After all, Kool-Aid makes the world go round.
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