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    Default I appreciate your profession, please correct it for me Thx

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    HB Hu

    Room 301 No.45, East Gui Ling Road
    Shanghai, China
    Mobile Phone: 13611874108 E-mail: EMAIL REMOVED - Send PM to This User Instead

    Objective

    Seeking managerial position in the marketing department of producing company.

    Summary of Qualifications

    4 years of marketing analysis learning
    Personal ability of planning, organizing, and interpersonal communicating
    Computer literate: Windows XP, Microsoft Office
    Native Chinese Speaker, fluent in English: speaking, writing and reading
    Relevant English certificates:
    1. CET-6, January 2002.
    2. CET-4, June 2001.
    Education

    Shanghai University Shanghai, China
    Post-Diploma of Shanghai University in Economics and Trade Expected June 2005
    Member of Student Union from 2001 to 2002
    Won top scholarship of Shanghai University in 2002

    Shanghai 54th School (senior high school) Shanghai, China
    Diploma received June 2000

    English course taken during university
    English Intermediary Interpretation, New World Language School (Shanghai), summer 2002

    Experience

    Assistant of Personnel Director, Shanghai QiangSheng Taxi Company, Shanghai China, Summer 2003
    Gained personnel skills through working
    Analysis some personnel information for my manager
    Prepared for routine meetings and do recording work

    My cover letter

    October 16, 2004
    Dear Sir or Madam,
    I am so interested by the post of vice manager of marketing department you offered on today’s Chin Daily. I am studying for my BA in International Economy and Trade at Shanghai University.
    Last summer, I was working as personal assistant for the personnel manager of the Shanghai QiangSheng Taxi Company as my part of my fieldwork required by the degree. In the process, when I was working through July to September, I really learned a lot of personnel skills about the relationship in working situation. Furthermore, I experienced a real improvement in my major skills of coordinating, leading and managing under many different situations. These experiences make me more interested in what I have learned and what I will learn in following semester.
    My master of what I learned in school get the appreciation of Mr. Zhu, who is my direct boss. He wants me back if I am willing after my graduation. He could be reached at 648,366,34.
    As a member of Students’ Union, I am so exciting of my job and several activities for students I have held. I am fluent in both Written and Spoken English. Mr. Terry Gao, our counselor, is willing to write a reference for me when required.
    I am available for my interview every evening. Please contact me at 13611874108. Looking forward to receive your reply.
    Thank you for your consideration.
    Sincerely yours,
    HB Hu

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    Re:
    • Seeking managerial position in the marketing department of producing company.


    Try:
    • Seeking managerial position in the marketing department of a production company.


    Say:
    • I am interested in the post of....


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    I am so interested

    Don't use'so' here- it doesn't work in formal writing. There's no need to modify things in this way- you're apllying for a job, so they know youwant it.

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    What Tdol said.

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    Quote Originally Posted by RonBee
    What Tdol said.

    :wink:
    Management position in the marketing department of production company.

    Summary of Qualifications

    4 years of marketing analysis
    planning, organization interpersonal communicating
    Computer literate: Windows XP, Microsoft Office
    Native Chinese Speaker, fluent in English
    Relevant English certificates:
    1. CET-6, January 2002.
    2. CET-4, June 2001.

    Education

    Shanghai University Shanghai, China
    Post-Diploma of Shanghai University in Economics and Trade
    June 2005
    Member of Student Union from 2001 to 2002
    Won top scholarship of Shanghai University 2002

    English Intermediary Interpretation, New World Language School (Shanghai), summer 2002

    Experience

    Assistant of Personnel Director, Shanghai QiangSheng Taxi Company, Shanghai China, Summer 2003

    REWORD PLEASE


    My cover letter

    October 16, 2004
    Dear Sir or Madam,
    I am interested by the post of vice manager of marketing department you posted in today’s Chin Daily. I am studying for my BA in International Economy and Trade at Shanghai University.
    Last summer, I worked as personal assistant for the personnel manager of the Shanghai QiangSheng Taxi Company as part of my fieldwork required for the degree. I learned about management and personnel on a hands on basis. These experiences allow me to apply my schooling to day-to-day situations and to keep on improving them.
    My master of what I learned in school get the appreciation of Mr. Zhu, who is my direct boss. He wants me back if I am willing after my graduation. He could be reached at 648,366,34. - PLEASE GIVE ME SOME DETAIL
    As a member of Students’ Union I have held spearheaded several activities for students.
    I am available for interviews during the evenings. References will be available upon request. Please contact me at 13611874108. I am looking forward to your reply.
    Thank you for your consideration.
    Sincerely yours,
    HB Hu[/quote] in posted in

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    I am so interested that I did not even bother to look up your name.

    Yawn - another one bites the dust - crinkle, crunch, a three pointer into the corner can.

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    Quote Originally Posted by MW
    I am so interested that I did not even bother to look up your name.

    Yawn - another one bites the dust - crinkle, crunch, a three pointer into the corner can.
    Nothing like being defeated by technology. This is not quite what I had in mind. Well, let's try it again.

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